Do not mock me nor raise your voice
In defiance of my will
Nor dare to tempt this heart of mine
No evil dare you spill
Do not mock me with your evil ways
Nor challenge this will of I
For so long have I learnt your rules
And by those rules you’ll die
These years have you held claim on me
For your sake flee tonight
Do not mock me Lucifer my friend
For now I stand to fight
In a list
A contest entry
- Spirituality Challenge by dustytiger.
900 points, ended November 29, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Fight!
He's not called the Adversary for nothing!
He's the father of lies & will die by The Father's rule! Passionate write. 
This is filled with passion & the desire to overcome evil. You can overcome with The Savior's blood covering you & through 
prayer! One thing:
These years have you held claim on me
For your sake flee tonight
Do not mock me Lucifer my friend
For now I stand to fight
Lucifer is not your friend. Don't take his power for granted. He's a powerful adversary & it's only through The Savior's help as advocate that we can win against him! Thanks for this write.
I'm tying to give you clappies & they're not taking! 
Short term memory problem. I read this back in Dec. of '08 & liked it then also!
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Interesting.
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Hehe! Yep...interesting. I wrote this many years ago when I was very young and very very angry. My JJ says the early poems show a lot about how I felt back then. Thanks for reading.
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Thanks, mate. This was one of my really early poem from the 1970's. I was a little bit peeved at the time. lol!!!!!!! -
Very nice write. I really liked the flow.
Laura
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Yeah. Written way back in the early 70's. Still endures. Thank you for reading.
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Excellent
A most intriguing write, indeed. Even though Lucifer does not have a place in my spiritual belief system, yet from past years of studing various christian belief systems, I can relate to this. Imagery; rhythm and rhyme are just fine. Thanks for sharing.
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Thanks, mate. I am not a religious person but my poems can cover any subject. Your comments are most welcomed.
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You are quite welcome. I'm not a religious person either, although, I do attempt to govern my life by non-dogmatic spiritual principles.
Happy New Year!
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Very well stated
No problem understanding...mac
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Thank you.
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Bravo!
I wasn't sure who you were talking to at first or actually who was talking until the last stanza! You keep up the good fight friend & endure! This is a good entry for this Contest!
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Thanks, mate. I'm 52 years old and long passed the parent rants. lol!!!!!!!!!! This was actually written when i was around 16 and i was a little on the wild side. It was my way of telling myself to pull my head in and not be lead astray by my wayward friends.
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I thought this was turning into a rather trite parent peace but introducing Satan into the last part or stanza makes the poem much more interesting. I liked the "by your rules you'll die" as that is exactly what the Christian faith says will happen.
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Quite a different poem...You take a fierce stand against someone who would challenge you...Good for you doing so...That's telling him...Great write!
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Hi, mate. Yes, i think this person is worth standing up to. It is none other than Lucifer, the devil himself. I fear that when i was very young and having been in the home for so many years, i was very angry. This poem was written in those times i guess in a way to put myself on the straight and narrow. I was just letting the devil know where i stood.
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This is a good challange against the Devil! i like it and just the fact that you present the challange with a dare! Great job and keep up the amazing work
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Thank you again, Boy, you have been busy! Yeah, the devil is worth the challenge.
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this fits great with the prompt! I love the lines , especillyt Do Not Mock me.....bravo on a piece well done!
becca
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Thanks, mate! Really appreciated.
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Powerful!!!
Profound in its depth of feeling & passion...
Great narrative, rhyme & flow that enthralled & captivated throughout...
Well penned, well versed, well done!!!
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Thank you so much for your reply. Your comments are truly appreciated and i am so glad you liked this piece.
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No probs, it was my pleasure...
Take care,
Fritz...............
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This is very powerful!!!! I love it!!! You did an amazing job with this piece!!!! This is so well written. I love your details and descriptions my friend this is marvelous. I am in Va now. I am supposed to write a poem for reptile lady and enter it into her contest but I am scared and don't know where to start so we will see what happens!!I love u my friend big hugs and kisses!!!!
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Thanks, mate. Thanks for your comments which are always appreciated and welcomed. VA, hey? I'm sure you will come up with a great poem because you write so well. Love and kisses return ten fold.
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Awesome
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this is really good, i like that it seems personal asking for someone to understand your faith and not tease you for believing, thank you for the entry
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Thank you for running the contest.
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You have certainly thrown down the gauntlet in this poem. A tremendous take on the prompt and a very creative
write. Well done and good luck in the contest.
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