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Obscured

Velvet whispers
Satin lies
plush filled voices
Sheer black sighs

Looks of silver
Cries of gold
Touches linger

Uncontrolled

 

Midnight beauty

Midday sweat

Moonlit sunshine

Unsung duet

 

Life is fleeting

Metal screams

"Things aren't always

What they seem"

 

Author notes

Remember... Things aren't always what they seem...

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  • Swan song gold member
    December 28, 2008
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    Stunning!!!! A very fine written peice of work congrats!

  • kittyom
    December 11, 2008

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    Dude...this is sweet...I get the imagary, and applaud you for your killer use of it as well as kicking our asses with the background!!!! This was AWESOME!!!!

    Kittyom


    • Soul-Alchemist
      December 11, 2008
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      THank you for the comment ^_^ I love knowing that I can grap a reader, hold them in a poem, and get a responce such as this.
      Thanks <3,
      Shadow


  • yourbentangel
    December 10, 2008

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    Your exactly right, I can think of many different avenues to take with this and my favorite is in my head. This was a great read which equals a great write! Thank you so much for sharing.

  • avatar1957
    December 10, 2008

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    Profound!!!

    shadow your right! to many times we see our world and others through our own filters and sometimes are filters are squewed. Your poem is an honest analogy for us all to consider!!!
    Profound
    Avatar1957


  • stella187
    December 1, 2008
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    Aren't is correct.


  • Commodore Rouge
    November 30, 2008

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    Oh, I like the eerie feeling this has! Your rhyming flows naturally, and I adore the faint rhythm your words have. They sort of remind me of the witches in Shakespeare's MacBeth, and I like how they talk, so naturally I was entertained by this. I am fascinated at how you pieced your phrases together; they appear to be sculpted individually till each one read the way they were desired to be. You offer a great message, and I was intrigued! Thanks for such great entertainment!

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