Why did you come tonight, you must have known:
our time is forgotten so long ago.
You must have known
cause you’re the one who let it go.
So why did you come now?
Now when I finally managed to forget your face,
to roam through my dreams without seeing you there
and move my lips without saying your name.
I admit, you were so damn good,
you knew your way with words perfectly.
And so fast you had me blind-folded,
holding onto your promises.
It was you who taught me the power of words.
First, they made me feel sky-high
and then I realized it was all a lie.
You showed me the shortcut from heaven to dust
and I was such a fool thinking we could last.
I truly believe that only deeds count,
only deeds remain, words get swallowed by time.
I don’t need your words, please don’t bother now,
I know every your excuse will be just another lie.
So, you want to know where you stand with me.
Let me be honest –
you don’t have the right to ask for anything.
Still, for old times’ sake, here’s my promise:
I’ll try not to look away when I see you,
but that’s about as much as I can give you.
I’m not angry anymore,
I just want to forget and let it go.
And it’s time you do the same.
The tables have turned,
now I’m teaching you -
goodbye, darling, goodbye for good.
Author notes
You vanished and left me nothing but a whole lot of inspiration and memories I will always treasure. 
A contest entry
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Outstanding! No wonder it won a gold trophy. I could feel the feelings as though I were there with you. Very powerful from the title onward. A beautiful piece of poetry! Really good write Nila! I'm glad I read it! Thanks for writing it!
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Thank you for stopping by. I was really mad with my friend when I wrote this one, but later I realized that being angry won't help me.
Thanks again!
Nela
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but.. your words made me so sad.. you are still brave,, I can't say bye
well written
liked it alot
by
the poet of hearts and beautiful words
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Thanks again dear!! Well, the end is kinda inevitable, but we're never ready for it. That's why I found my peace afterward, when I wrote this poem.
Nela
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Congrats on the gold, well desurved. Keep writing.
~ Chelsey
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Thank you so much for stopping by and commenting.
Nela
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I very much enjoyed this- although I don't like the background colour or font (but that has nothing to do with the poem which is what you want to hear....ha)
These lines stood out for me:
"And move my lips without saying your name
I admit, you were so damn good"
That line could have been cliche, but you gave it heart and meaning- excellent work. The flow was good, although I always like it when stanzas are broken up- pauses are good for reader reflection, the more they think the more they understand and appreciate your poem.
You are an excellent story teller, no frills, but honest and well written. A good combination!
All the best and thanks for entering,
KP
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Thank you for your comment. I'm planning to do a revision of my poems, to put more punctuation and stanzas. The problem is I don't have time right now.
Thanks again
Nela
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Much better
I really like the ending , closed very well.
and i thought this bit :
You don’t have the right to ask for anything
Still, for old times’ sake, here’s my promise:
I’ll try not to look away when I see you
But that’s about as much as I can give you
was absolutly fantastic. great write ^^
Laura
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First off, you really should change the font colour, it's awful to read, not so easy on the eyes.
Really enjoyed this write, thanks for entering it. Sometimes you just have to let things go and move on. Although it is very difficult to know when this applies to your situation. I feel that in the situation you describe it was definitely the right choice.
I think the sense of bitterness at the end is good. Was a great way of ending this poem. Thanks for entering. -
That is soooo lovely!
Thank you for entering my contest!!
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one more time
another round of applause for this and a standing ovation, I got my lighter's up..... -
WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW
I love it you are now one of my favorite poets on this whole site. I can't believe I ran into this poem now after all this I been through. Oh yes This was amazing where do I begin there is so much lets see the line:
So, you want to know where you stand with me
Let me be honest –
You don’t have the right to ask for anything
Still, for old times’ sake, here’s my promise:
I’ll try not to look away when I see you
But that’s about as much as I can give you
I’m not angry anymore
I just want to forget and let it go
Doesn't it feel so goooooood to finally be free!!! To just let it go, not to hold on to the past, my friend your inspiration and setermination to move on is inspiring and comes from heaven above. So many people can't get through such rough patches but you did I did and thats says alot about strength keep it up and keep the faith!!!
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wao- you're really good!!!
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wow, full of emotion. it had excellent flow, and was full of powerfull imagery. Keep up the good work. Peace, Love, and Ink x).
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very well written and a very powerful ending
great write
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'heartfelt.'
beautiful words, powerfully poised to annihilate anybodys heart..
am GENUINELY pleased this wasn't scribed for me.. lol!
'.. shortcut, from heaven to dust..'
this guy obviously DID affect you?
i wish you every love and hope you can continue to move forwards, get qualified, enjoy your career, and make a life with the unknown.
/alastair.. xxz
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