I saw a halo on the devil's head
one could say that I saw it all
but in the reality of this world
just another man that took a fall
Words spoken in a simple breath
can be printed upon a page
as this world whispers in silence
for the words that know no age
Do you really think he knew
the words he spoke meant a thing
do you truly believe an angel
wears that everlasting ring
Ah, but we are but humans
not ventured before the stars
yet we speak of all so highly
cause they drive such fancy cars
Well it’s time to wake up
realize who works the nation
it is the people with calloused hands
that have suffered much indignation
Author notes
"Moral indignation is jealousy with a halo."
- H. G. Wells (1866-1946)
A contest entry
- NO GREENS! - A Rounds Contest by Pamela A Lamppa.
1700 points, ended January 20, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I am a bit lost in the transition from beginning to end; I am not clear who he was/is or what "words" were said. However, I love the opening line and the truth held by your intended message in the closing line. Lack of punctuation may have hindered your message in my reading.
A good effort
ken
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This poem has the lilting cadence of a folk song, a Woody Guthrie paean to the working man. So often the contributions of the "common" worker are overlooked and underpaid while the "money men" reap the glory and the benefits. Nicely written. Good luck in this contest. Peace, Liz
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I saw "a" halo... May wish to tweak that little typo.
I would really have liked to see some end line punctuation in this piece. The question marks presented at the end of the questions, a full-stop/period at the end of sentences, etc.
I do however, agree whole-heartily in the message presented and wish too that the true heart of the world is run by the workers. At least a nation, so to speak.
Good rhyme and nice meter in this piece. Thank you for your entry and best of luck in this round. ~Pamela
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Wow ....
I love the introduction to this poem --- a VERY powerful image to be sure, one that shaped the entire poem, IMHO. Just one thing -- it should be " devil's head" ... you're missing an apostrophe.
Your closing is powerful, poignant, and most of all, true.
Thank you for sharing, and good luck in the judging.
In His Love,
Zach
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THIS IS EXCELLENT GREAT RHYME AND RHYTHM, SORT OF AN INDIGNANT RANTING STOMP. LOVE IT VERY CLEVERLY CRAFTED.WOULD LOVE TO HEAR THIS SUNG
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