she's quiet
like a house
where windows
don't welcome the sunlight
A contest entry
- Micro-Poetry by Yemassee.
631 points, ended December 3, 2008, 31 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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So good to see a green cup on this little poem that says a lot abou the way life can be, times when we are not open to things like the light, wisdom, new ideas...the world can be darker until we act... very thoughtful... PK
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And now it's "green" solitude!
You sounds resound!
M-C -
Thanks. And I'm sorry for all the trouble with adding entries. I might have had 80 entries if AP had been helping me a little.
Top notch poem by the way. I had to comment again to make it official.
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That house must be a cold place, and everything inside it as well. ---- Very telling, thank you.
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just speechless...
...the need to be disconnected, and sometimes we need to...
this is what got me. I love this one
Anna Lee
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A description of a creature of the night...
M-C
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your poem reminds me of the seed that has to go under the earth in order to sprout and grow ... if we dig it out to see how it's doing, it won't be able to do its job ...
I very much enjoy short verse with a powerful message ...
thank you, my sweet friend,
mari -on
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I like it! And I've seen that...the "she's quiet" from many people...including you. Shutting oneself out...most likely because the person senses that it's their only alternative...and lots of reasons why it might be their only one, which is neither here nor there right now.
It's sad too, both for the "she" and for anyone who cares for her, that sees those "shut windows."
Thanks E-G. It's typical you, which is top shelf poetry.
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Interesting.
I didn't quite understand the last two lines, but I liked the poem.
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