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The Bloody Hell that we are

watching a wound fade into a scar
only fades the bloody hell that we are
retracing them with a single blade
only proves the choice to fade
watching your skin appear united
only hides the thoughts that you've ignited
crying tears that are clear of threat
only denies the future you've set
bleeding for an audience that is blind
only creates silence in your mind
what is there to do,
when no other pain seems to fool you?
what is there to say,
when the pain refuses to go away?
watching a wound bleed through your sleeve
only proves the fact that you will never leave.
reinscribing them with the same intention,
only proves your want for attention.
screaming for an audience that is deaf,
only creates the need for another breath.
crying tears that are clear of sin,
only proves that life will win.
what is there to impale,
when happiness continues to fail?
what is there to realize,
when believing only works for lies?
what is there to live for,
when death isn't on your side anymore?

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  • Maili Knephthan gold member
    January 15

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    The description behind the blade and why it is used it well done. It tells a story of despair. Thank you for entering this contest.


  • DecorusApparatus
    January 5

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    This is a very moving write. Your language and use of rhyme is very commendable and consistent. I have an emotional connecton with this poem definitely and think that you have put alot into it.
    "reinscribing them with the same intention,
    only proves your want for attention.
    screaming for an audience that is deaf,
    only creates the need for another breath"
    i think that these lines were really beautiful, you show alot of potential in your writing.
    Thankyou very much for entering this into my contest.


    • BrittlesSkittles
      January 5

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      thanks! i'm glad you enjoyed it! i appreciate the applause and the honorable mention. your comment was incredibly insightful and it's rare that i get a comment like that. =]


  • FleetingImage
    January 2
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    Oh wow what a great poem. I absolutely loved it and just had to read it again...good luck.


  • gigglesalot
    December 11, 2008
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    great poem full of lots of questions, answers and unsolved answers. loved it. great write

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