night moans
resounded as soft
as when you entered...and left
Author notes
ahem...Brida made me do it 
A contest entry
- Micro-Poetry by Yemassee.
631 points, ended December 3, 2008, 31 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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WAY TO GO! Nice job on this. Aren't you glad Brida made you do this!
THANKS!
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yes I am
thanks pat
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Ah..the wonderful thought you portrayed in words..a life is spent in the lines you wrote..well done..and many thanks for this poem..
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Wow~
My Mind was getting all kinds of thoughts and I was trying to type and forgot what I was going to say
...entered and left...left me speechless
Excellent Beautiful!
Adore the background too~
Looks like two aliens smooching
Congratulations on Your HM win!
-Throws confetti-
Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo
Gosh I check Your page one day- and somewhat caught up and then leave for a day or two
then BAM- quill on fire again
Geesh~ I need to hire someone just to watch You
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet One
Best wishes too
with much love & light~ Desire~*~
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so nicely done! love the double meaning.
these are so intriguing to me. if I keep reading your haiku, I'm gonna have to break down and try to write some.
congrats.
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Ooh! I love this. Well done and congrats on the HM. I love the background image!! Lovely! Great work.
Much love
Ylova
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Sex
And the whys and ways of it. But just a gentle entry in the middle of the nite can bring such joy.
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a micro poem but a wonderful sense of place and sounds, how so many things in life are marked by the tones we associate with them ...from music to thunder in the mountains... to the human voice...and sounds in the night, beautiful poetry here...PK
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I think it was SB that made you do it.
First, great side background thingie, classy and erotic.
Now I see why we had the argument about defining lust.
But you know what? I'll stand my ground here...the lustful may enjoy reading it but it's the sentimental and passionate who will understand the poem...the double entendre and all.
"resounded as soft"
I'm trying to figure out how you decided upon this contradiction...I guess it's in the interpretation of desire...the intensity may be what propels the idea of it "resounding."
As usual, you capture desire at its most beautiful and even make me see depths I'm sure you don't think are there...like that double entendre,
"as when you entered...and left"
even in that erotically charged line, there is a (dare I say it) sadness..."and left" not withdrew but..."left." As in..."got what he wanted and left."
And there-in I prove my argument...lust leaves...passion stays. I win.
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Well, passion leaves too.
I see your point and I don't disagree - completely-
but ah, we discussed that before
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Passion doesn't leave...desire decides to kill off passion.
That photo is too washed out, folk can't see how good looking you are. Yes, keeping "IT" at bay.
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Hm, I think you are taking thoughts out of your sleeves
Passion, desire, love they all get off the race before the finishing line, many times
The photo, yes, that was the intention, vague
IT thanks you
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I never talk out of my sleeve...how would one do that anyway...I'd have to learn to ventriloquism like that Jeff Dunham guy..."Achmed the Dead Sleeve" or something.
Yeah, Stick a fork in me, I am officially done.
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Good for Brida!
Letting the mind imagine the sounds...
and the cause...
Great one, Mari!
M-C
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love this one, Mari...the dark is never silent and the sounds you've pressed here so softly against this page is so very sensual. lovely innuendo here!
~ Nicolette
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wow.... nice write...... I can ponder this one for awhile, no question about that. Great poetic resonance.
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love this, Mari...
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hmmm very sensual Mari...Wow night sounds...this is music to me
Anna Lee
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As long as the sound doesn't come from a mosquito or from snoring, then it's all good
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lol I hate mosquito sounds too... I'll have a pillow cover my head
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