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I am Jack's...

I am Jack's complete lack of self-control
I can't help myself around you
I'm fully intoxicated ...
By your eyes
By your smile
By your scent
By the essence that is you

Why do you have to smell so good?

 

I am Jack's sense of spontaneity

I never think before i act

I just do

And that's dangerous for us, especially for me

I always get in too deep

Drowning in an endless sea of emotions

Grabbing your face, kissing your lips, it's dangerous

As if i care

 

I am Jack's slow reaction time

I never realise what's right in front of me

Until it's too late

And it's already gone

and your already gone

I guess it's true what they say

"You never know what you have til it's gone"

Damn it

 

I am Jack's newly broken heart

Freshly burst open, and spilt in two

Losing love

Losing the one

Losing you

Worst mistake of my life

What if you were the one?

Now you're just the one that got away

 

I am Jack's redemption

I'm alive

I'm fine

I've moved on

Life goes on

Old wounds heal

Time keeps moving forward

Even for us

 

I am Jack's hope for the future

 

Author notes

This was fun actually. I love fight club. I'm in love with Tyler Durden. This was awsome to write.

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  • Zenda-Lokki silver member
    December 22, 2008
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    Haha great job hun x Well deserved bronze trophy. Good luck in the Peer Pressure contest.


  • suzume
    December 14, 2008
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    Very interesting/relatable voice. I'm glad you had fun. I think it shows.

    Thanks for entering


  • Wolf Run0
    December 12, 2008

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    Haha! Honey, I just entered the same contest on a whim and noticed your poem. I laughed n'cause it was a funny coincidence.
    Wish me luck, and OF COURSE best of luck to you, too!
    -Renesmee


  • ghosttown
    December 12, 2008

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    The first two stanzas immediately made me thing "Edward Cullen", but that might just be because I just got back from seeing the movie. Anyway, very good. I liked it.


  • Wolf Run0
    November 30, 2008
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    Wow, lovely. Very cool- I really liked this.
    I THINK YOU SPELLED EVERYTHING RIGHT!!!!!


    • blondevamp
      November 30, 2008
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      YEEEEESSSS! I might drop dead since i spelled things correctly.

  • HighRise Dusk
    November 29, 2008
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    Wow. I laughed. AMAZING PIECE OF...POETRY


  • LoveLikePoetry
    November 29, 2008
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    This was really nice
    I loved the whole thing


  • The Amazon Seer
    November 29, 2008
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    Dude! Amazing and wonderful topic.

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