Clack
Talking can take a lot of time
out of your day
if you enjoy talking
to the person you're
talking to.
Clack click
If you enjoy talking to the person
you're talking to,
a lot becomes rather blurry.
The sharp clicking noises
he's making
with your metal eating utensils
cease to be annoying,
and instead
enhance
the experience.
Clack click clack, clack
I've noticed that when you've found
a person that you enjoy
talking to,
you take the time to
walk a little faster,
or leave a little earlier,
in order to talk a few
extra minutes
with that person.
Click, click, click clack clack, click
And if for some reason
they don't appear
where they normally do,
when they normally do,
you wait a while
in case they're just a little
late,
hoping that they'll come around
the corner
in a second.
Clack clack, click, clack clack
I have different spoons today,
but they're plastic,
so there's no point in
trying
to be rhythmic
while I wait.
He's better at it than I am
anyway.
Author notes
Option 2: Plastic Spoons
Is it odd that the first thing that came to mind when I saw that title was "Plastic spoons wouldn't work very well for playing purposes?" I tuned my mbira to a jazz scale over Thanksgiving.
A contest entry
- You Choose - No Rules by Dalaney.
1200 points, ended December 6, 2008, 23 entries
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Comments
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this is perfectly creative. i love the breaks to hear the click clack of the spoons. and the imagery is quite nice, but i think what i like most is the simplicity of it all.
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This is rather different. In my opinion, it's like something between way-too-explicit and individually-mysterious. It's very repetitive and that enhances the idea of routine, of waiting for that person, maybe how that person becomes a habit. I found it interesting how these lines:
"you take the time to
walk a little faster"
seem so antithetical. It sounds like a paradox till you read the next lines to match the idea with a context. I also just love how random yet true the ending is... I had that wtf feeling at first, like, "...plastic spoons?! all of a sudden like that?" but I think it's the most creative and emotional part of the poem.
Somehow, this makes me feel sad. Although this ending could mean a sort of liberation. Overall, it's an interesting poem.
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a very creative take on the prompt
i always enjoy reading poetry with that
innovative twist. You have done a fine
piece. Thank you so much for entering.
Love, Lane -
Interesting. Very rhythmic. I like the buildup of tension as you add the clacks between each stanza.
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