Candy canes are sited in stockings at night.
Holly and Mistletoe mask up the plain
Red and green cover the surroundings
Icicles reside on the window panes
Snow flakes descend from the skies
Traffic is piled up for miles and miles
Merry Christmas, the children shout
Angels send down their smiles
St. Nick is well on his way
Traditions are made
Inspiration is placed
Miracles are made
Everything, once a year, is calm and all okay.
Author notes
Candycane, stocking, holly, mistletoe, red, green, icicles, snowflakes, traffic, christmas, angels, St.Nick, traditions, miracles. Acrostic: (CHRISTMAS TIME)
A contest entry
- Allpoetry Kids Christmas Bash 2008 (win a gold membership) by Little Eagle.
4200 points, ended January 11, 24 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Rereading this poem... I have to tell you that I love the first part. The second part makes it less interesting. Sometimes it's better to use less words with a better result. If I were you I would call this acrostic "Christmas" and write it like this:
Candy canes are sited in stockings at night
Holly and Mistletoe mask up the plain
Red and green cover the surroundings
Icicles reside on the window panes
Snow flakes descend from the skies
Traffic is piled up for miles and miles
Merry Christmas, the children shout
Angels are sending down their smiles
St. Nick is well on his way!
Just beautiful! A prize winner!
Anna.
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I really like that you have made this into such an exciting poem
it really puts me in the mood for Christmas to be here now - waiting seems to take forever! This flows very well for an acrostic and I think you have sone an amazing job using all of the words from the word bank
Merry Christmas!
Polly
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Much better indeed.
I am proud of you!
Well done.
Anna.
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aw..this is beautiful great flow within your acrostics...sometimes they can seem choppy, but yours flows flawlessly good luck
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How's this?
I corrected my mistakes, is this any better?
- Happy Holidays, ♥ Tiffany. -
This is nice I love acrostics so this contest is great. I like the way you used so many of the wordbank words...and I like the way you tried to make it rhyme. Lots of luck and happy holidays
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I am already in the Christmas mood after reading this poem. You did a wonderful job. A word bank and an Acrostic. Very well done.
I found two grammatical mistakes.
Line 7: "Merry Christmas, shout the children"
children is plural... so shout.
I would have liked it better when you had written:
"Merry Christmas, the children shout"
sounds better English to me.
Line 8: "Angels send down their smiles"
I think you mean not one angel but more - plural of angel is angels. Angel's means Angel is/was send...
Still very well done. As I said you brought me in the Christmas mood already!
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