Love Everlasting by poeticweaver at All poetry

Let me be the phantom of your romantic dreams

Do the tango entwined to your favorite song

Reveal me within the river of in-betweens

Grace me with the beauty of your friendship life-long

Float upon cotton clouds where no-one's ever wrong

Be cleansed with sweet love that flows within candy streams

Where gibberish tongues translate a truth lasting strong

Teaching violent souls on our planet what peace means

Love Everlasting.

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Champagne Eyes
December 27, 2008

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Amazing.
This is breath taking, I love the use of words, the way you used then...very well done!
Swangrnv
December 27, 2008

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outstanding!
An absolute beauty of a piece, and the rhyme and flow were totally on point! love all the imagery as well..
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Lost Vampyre Angel
December 20, 2008

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awww bro this is so beautiful,
I love all the romance in this poem! gosh your girl is lucky your a wonderful poet I love the poem so much great work bro

kitty xxx
Angelshadow
December 2, 2008
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I like it.
sense surreal
December 1, 2008

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beautiful...stunning
Do the tango entwined to your favorite song
Reveal me within the river of in-betweens

these lines are amazing!!!
this is one of the most beautiful page I've ever seen
aanika
December 1, 2008

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Grace me with the beauty of your friendship life-long
Float upon cotton clouds where no-one's ever wrong
Be cleansed with sweet love that flows within candy streams

this was written so beautifully.
I love the imagery and the rhyme scheme.
PrettyRagDoll
December 1, 2008

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Simply lovely!
This was simply lovely. It has been so long since I have seen a love poem; it has been much longer since I have seen a GOOD love poem. This poem almost seems to have two layers- one, a beautiful poem about romantic love. The second is one I based on your last line,"teaching violent souls on our planet what peace means"; it gave me a sense that this poem was about more than love between two people. While I was reading this, the voice in my head read it in a very soft and meaningful way. I loved your word choices because they were descriptive and intelligent; you truely thought about each word instead of just throwing around adjectives you found in the thesaurus (sp?). Thank you for sharing. Good writes always brighten my day!
-Jenny
SmokinHotWhiteTiger
November 30, 2008

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Incredible
My gah wqhat can I say about this write from you., I am absolutely stunned and amazed by the sheer complexity and volume to this poem of yours. I really love that picture you added to the poem as it just really livens the poem uop beautifully and its just amazing any ways truky a magnificent write and keep up the excellent work as always
Wandika
November 30, 2008
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Well thought out
an excellent write Timothy.
Lonely
November 30, 2008

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Oh wow..
Such a wonderful romantic poem Tim.
And the background.. the way its merging with that flower.. too much
I love your poem.. Each and every word
I love the last line the most.. You have woven yet another masterpiece Master

Peace
Lonely
Katie Lazette
November 30, 2008

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You have penned well my friend. Your choice of words make your poem flow with beauty. Wonderful write. I enjoyed reading your poem.
Tadd
November 30, 2008
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well writen
FaerieDust9213
November 30, 2008

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so beautiful.
this is great! the imagery really paints a picture. i feel love flowing in every word. i enjoyed reading this
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Introvert2006
November 29, 2008

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Great Weaving Weaver!
Another meaningful masterpiece my friend!
Thanks for sharing, and pen on. Great Write!

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poeticpieces
November 29, 2008

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Wonderfully Versed Dad As Always!
Thanks for sharing,
and keep up the beautifully written poems.
You amaze me always, and I love ya Dad!

Tim Jr. aka poeticpieces.
Cant force beloved
November 29, 2008

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I loved this it was rather good for reading but 'life-long' had me a little stuck. But really the poem was rather lovely reading.

JO
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Draig aine
November 29, 2008
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lovley
a pleasure to read
Stardust-luvr
November 29, 2008

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my dearest I hold you close with everlasting love and peace and as tears befall from my soul there are many lines that you and your friendship has entwined within my heart and your words have graced these pages and my spirit with so much love and encouragement. love you always -thank you for all you are and all you do as you are my everlasting rainbow, well done and many blessings always xxxxxxxxxxx
OurGoldenYears Page
November 29, 2008

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Very beautiful, your love glows and flows so gracefully in this, it provides one with possible dreams of sweet success, thank you for sharing,
good luck

Happy Holidays to you and yours
VOE....
Desire
November 29, 2008

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Oh My Timothy~
Oy~ This is a Beautiful weaving of words my Friend and I imagine smiles upon faces of those who read.
Srong images from within speak out~
Excellent message~
Tight rhyme~
Keep that quill dancing ~
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You and Yours Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
with much love & light~ Desire~*~
theredcatjazzoflove
November 29, 2008

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cry this was so so nice mushy as usual i like this whole set up dear i enjoyed this good luck
poetryrocksmysox
November 29, 2008

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Lovely,
This is nicely penned, has a great flow, and captivates so many images of meaning. Like how you always have some lines in here that almost everyone can relate to dear soul. Thanks for sharing your gifted heart here, and thanks for being the best example I've ever seen as for trying to show love and living it. Peace to you poeticweaver.