Empty road
no sign in sight
barren are your offerings
No blessings pave your journey
yet you sprinkle empty convictions
along the way...
Many years you've travelled
wayward to your quest
you've become a slave to your delinquencies
trying to save your soul.
You've run far to long
from truth that signals each turn
Once all provisions are depleted
hopefully your pride won't keep you
far from home.
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Picture prompt #1...http://th04.deviantart.com/fs39/300W/i/2008/334/6/f/The_fog_at_the_end_by_Snakeraid.jpg
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Very good
So often the young in their search for their perfect life and in the quest to do it their way often gets lost yet it is a pthe so taken by many before them those who also chose to not hear the elders about them .So as they grow and learn its not untill later they find they themselves caused the pain to themselves but now that they have seen the truth are they willing to move on and find the path of safety and love
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Thanks so much for sharing your thoughts on this piece...it's funny watching the new generations repeat old bad habits insisting to only learn through personal experience...and sadly there are those who still continue to live the 'Peter Pan' syndrome without ever transitioning to adulthood!
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No double spacing necessary, try couplets or more inventive way otherwise the piece does not flow in single lines, it becomes just fragments.
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