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A piece of pie

Pie in the sky
lands in your eye.
Strangely, it opens.

A contest entry

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  • just mercedes gold member
    December 9, 2008
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    Very unexpected ending! Well done - fresh and vivid.


  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    December 4, 2008

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    An eye-opening experience,
    the dream, the wishful thinking
    coming true, beating the odds
    of reality???

  • Yemassee gold member
    November 29, 2008

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    The eye opens, or the sky opens? both?

    Of course I see this as those wide-eyed dreams which actually come true.

    I think this is the first rhyming poem in the contest so that (that I have read) Thanks!