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[ putting tired feet up ]

putting tired feet up
in soft recliner chair
the dentist smiles

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  • Mirthryl
    November 30, 2008

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    Either the dentist is smiling at his relaxing evening or his unrelaxed patient! Sounds like a write from one who knows


  • Harrisham Minhas
    November 30, 2008
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    Well-written.


  • Mari Goes gold member
    November 29, 2008

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    Once I fell asleep while waiting for anesthesia start to work.
    Your haiku has a very light feel and a solid image. Well done


  • Yemassee gold member
    November 29, 2008

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    In this haiku I see a twist, that the dentist is the one putting his feet up...and in his recliner of course. I wonder if he sees the parallel, the dentist I mean?

    I wonder if the wife brings him a drink and says, "Open wide?"

    Thanks a lot for entering the contest.