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Cinder of Soul

There is a place I know so well
with heat of passion in control.
A secret place within my shell,
next to the cinder of my soul.

I have a torch within my heart,
a flaming light that makes me whole.
I keep it in my secret part,
next to the cinder of my soul.

I find that when the world grows cold,
emotions fuel the flame like coal.
There’s only one that I shall hold,
next to the cinder of my soul.

There is a place I know so well,
next to the cinder of my soul.

 

 

 

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The contest asked for two poems a new one and a pre-write the pre-write is:  Here

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  • Cup-a-Joe
    December 23, 2008
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    This is so gold. How could it not be?
    Joe


  • Swan song gold member
    December 19, 2008
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    Excellent dear I could amost sing it! very good!


  • Sokarjo
    December 15, 2008

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    This could not be any more perfect. It is perfection in definition. Beautiful!! You have amazing talent and poetry is as natural to you as breathing is to many others. I love this! I cannot say enough good about it. Well deserving of a gold trophy! Thank you so very much for entering! :-)


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    December 13, 2008

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    The cinders of my soul, this is such a striking chord. You have a great interpretation of everything you write. Again I am awed. Best to you in the contest


  • poetryality silver member
    December 1, 2008

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    YOU are the Empress of form poetry. Your sentiments flow effortlessly, and cause me to delve deep within my own "soul".

    BRILLIANT!

    I wish you the very best in the challenge.


    Much Love ♥

    Renee


  • blueyez
    December 1, 2008

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    I love it!!! You know this is my most favorite form and you do it oh so well!!!!
    Peace and Love always


  • Rovingone gold member
    November 30, 2008

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    Oh, so fine! Near the cinder of your soul. That is purely poetic in the finest sense of the word. So moving a piece.


  • Cup-a-Joe
    November 30, 2008
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    Awesomewise. and Good too.
    Joe


  • JohnnyD gold member
    November 30, 2008

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    I agree with Jeff- one of your best Cubbie-yes indeed

    being well aware of passion's power-I'm also well aware
    of its inherent dangers-all too well.

    For it is true that it takes passion
    To pen passion
    Which shows-so amply-
    In this write.

    Passion-sweet passion-
    True passion – true
    Is like a Cobra of
    Glowing coals
    Entwined around one's soul-

    Ready to strike
    And sink its fangs
    Into a soon to be
    -enchanted other-

    But-beware-
    As passion’s venom
    Is potent.
    For it can either
    Heal a heart-
    Or destroy it.

    Dependent on
    Its intent-



    Dad


  • Overcast
    November 29, 2008

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    This is simply brilliant.Beautiful, almost lyrical and rhythmic with some really good metaphors!
    Bookmarked!


  • myrataal silver member
    November 29, 2008

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    Ah. Passion.

    The wondrous thing about passion is: it is a dynamo; the coil between the poles of the electomagnet ...

    How wondrous this Field called Love ...

    Your poetry is its own generator: the repetition sparks its motion. Also in my soul.

    Powerful and beautiful.

    Love
    Myra


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 29, 2008

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    all i can say that this was golden my friend this was, once again you have knocked one out of the box, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • Pure Thought silver member
    November 29, 2008

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    I have read 4 poems tonight, all four so different but equally brilliant.
    I think I shall start a compendium of brilliance. You are so in.


  • Wandika gold member
    November 29, 2008
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    Nicely done


  • Swangrnv gold member
    November 29, 2008
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    beatiful

    perfectly flowing, song chock full of internal melodies to this reader.. I think this is gold..


  • nordicsky silver member
    November 29, 2008

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    Thank you for posting such a beautifully flowing poem. I thought the repeated last line was very evocative.

    Your poetry is a treat that I probably don’t deserve.

    Kind regards, Peter


  • HaleyMary
    November 29, 2008

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    Beautiful write, Amera. You have a wonderful flow, as always and I loved the title of this. It makes me think of how sometimes if the world seems like a cold cruel place, people should try to love themselves and try to see the bright side to life. Thanks for sharing your talent and best of luck in the contest.


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    November 29, 2008
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    This one you have got spot on, Sis.


  • Ariosto II. gold member
    November 29, 2008

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    Part of the joy I get in reading your work, is the fantastic mesh of your crystalline structures.

    lovely piece


  • cricketjeff gold member
    November 29, 2008

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    Tender words in a beautifully soft form, you truly are the mistress of repeating line poetry and the Kyrielle sonnet suits you perfectly.
    This is amongst your very best

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