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lineage wields the knife

 
 
 
 
 
her small strings abound
rising from a mothers' flesh-
 
tangled in the comfort
of hollow bones
 
as she stumbles upon

her age
 
~
 
pale
like each fallen pearl-
once-removed,
 
she is all memory here
come the sinking
 
~
 
each habit of older lifetimes
framed young
 
she opposes
by burying all but her mind
 
~
 
the sacred wood askew
 
she finds herself aware:
of how each moment is a contrast

 

between a thing
and it's echo
 
with the hieroglyph splayed
between
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 

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Credit: Egregor ... http://kkl.deviantart.com/art/Egregor-60310035
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  • astralshepherd gold member
    December 3, 2008

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    i really admire your line breaks and word choice - i always do - there is too much here that resonates with my deepest self, especially at the same place of stumbling (tho personal health issues obscure as well) I find the place of skewed sacrifice – sacred in purpose and in ideal so similar to mine... I found the line ” each moment is a contrast between a thing and it's echo" particularly impacting. Dearest poet, you are in my thots, my prayers and my hopes for an easing of sinking feelings – may the moon and stars embrace your dreams, the dreams we both hold dearest. blessings and best wishes,


  • Cannonsfire
    November 29, 2008

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    We become the likeness for what goes before us, funny how we image ourselves with the thing we probably find less attractive, perhaps we do it as a mask to hide what we really want to be, glad to say sometimes we blossom, it just takes time. C


  • stasis
    November 29, 2008
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    All I can say... is that this is fantastic.
    And I'm bookmarking it.

    ♣ Tegan


  • Cat
    November 29, 2008
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