I walk through the valley of my mind
No-one's there but me
The darkness gets in my way
And makes it hard to see
I lower my head and hide away
The darkness seems to follow
I cannot think i cannot say
In this place i wallow
A bright light appears before me
It makes me close my eyes
The darkness all begins to flee
The light heads for the skys
The reason i was saved that day
Was because of you
Your right here in my memories
With all you say and do
Author notes
Memories was the inspiration i used ^_^
A contest entry
- Waiting for your loved one... by Invisible 2 you.
550 points, ended November 30, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
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What did you think
Comments
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This was alright. There are a few spelling and grammar mistakes, no one not no-one. I like the idea but the follow through didn't quite make it. I like the descriptions that you used. Good job and good luck in the contest.
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I like this a lot. it is.. idk.. i just like it lol
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Awesome!
I've felt like this a few times about people that I have met.
You captured the dark before the light so incredibly well.
Read your poem because "walk thru the valley of my mind" was so powerful and such good imagery... I couldn't help it. So glad I did.
Well done on this amazing piece.
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