my mind is like a jungle.
Interwoven pathways of discarded vines
create the complexity pathways that are my thoughts.
These thoughts form random patterns
and create mass headache like problems.
A typical thought will be confronted by
several smaller vines, which open
into a series a small passageways
where the answers formulate
called my subconscious.
Without these vines formulating
the predestined pathway to the subconscious,
my mind would be blankness forever.
Author notes
this may not make sense to you but there is a reason to the poem
A contest entry
- In Your Head by Candyknife.
700 points, ended November 30, 2008, 21 entries
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Different
This is different but I did like it very much. Well done.
Keep writing and I'll keep reading
Love Always
Your Ap Wifey
Countrybabe
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Some things that make no sense to others, make all the sense in the world. Thanks for offering your talent and weaving your thoughts for us to ponder upon!
Peace.
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very good
this is what i was looking for, something that makes sense to the writer, but is difficult (or politely complex) so it could interpret in different ways, very good thanks for entering -
Welcome to the jungle
Hey Paul, no wonder I haven't heard from ya in ages, you're too busy swinging from vines in the jungle. Just be careful you don't slip and do a face-plant when walking on the canopy, by slipping on some banana peel that a monkey threw away... lol, j/k. I enjoyed the read.
Maybe the Seahawks could use a poem to help them focus on their task of finding some way of winning a freakin' game once in a while. You may be able to fire them up with one. Just a thought Paul.
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Your poetic brain is working and this is the proof because it has the elements that English literature teachers try to get their students to use... similes and metaphors.
I send you my best wishes for finding the right path in life, for it's a jungle out there. 
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I liked this. Especially because it's open to interpretation, and I can read the way I like. If I were to give any critic, it would be to punctuate the poem, as it just goes into one right now, and it's quite hard to read that way. Just a suggestion. Other than that, great poem!
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