I am the unconscious subconscious
The thoughts that prevail in your mind
The spidery sinewy cobwebs
The realism behind the facade
I am the colourless rainbow
The thunder black clouds in clear skies
The bittersweet taste of revulsion
The love of your life you despise
I am forever and finished
The beginning that became your end
I am forever after
The enemy you took as your friend
Please tell me what you think
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ok ok ok... I love the flow but I also love the contradictions!!! I love a write that can find a way to tie them together because sometimes in life this is how it goes!
Peace and Love
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Thanks Sara,
Life is the greatest contradiction...we're supposed to enjoy life, while yet knowing that we're going to die.... Go figure...How the hell can I enjoy something when I know it's going to end, but never know when it will be...it's got to gnaw perpetually on the mind.... I bet you're thinking about it now aren't you?
Such is the evil of D...I'm always in the mind 
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Welll this is definaely inetersting. I like the style as always and keep up the good work
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Thanks Annie.
Interesting eh? When is what I write, not interesting? lol. There is so much that constantly buzzes around my mind, like a whirling vortex of randomness....
Glad you like this, and thanks for the comment.
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everyone is there own enemy, sometimes you hate yourself and sometimes you can't trust yourself either that's why i think we are our own worst enemy's.
Great write here Scott.
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Indeed we are. As for trusting ourselves, when that moment that we no longer trust ourselves arises, then we are surely in trouble.
Glad you like, and thanks for the comment
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that last line is something that hits me as a kind of truth, a harsh truth, i am not just my own enemy, just something that came to my mind, keep it flowing
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Thanks very much
We are all, very much our own enemies, and our own best friends...but we are the enemies of others and the friends of others...it how we live our lives that determines how we're remembered...
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yay !
im glad you finished this
it turned out nicely
that first line is absolutely compelling
good job with this
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lol, someone's happy to see this piece finished
Glad you like it Rena, and thanks for proof reading and encouraging me to finish it
Thanks for the comment
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Wow
Like um yea what da hell is up with this write. that is one complicated ending of your poem BUT.... I love it! you make the viewer ponder what exactly the poem is about and interrept in our own little way. any ways this is just a very brilliantly penned poem and to me its about feelings and how the mind interrepts things and just basically well it feels like someone is stuck between a rock and hard tight space and well damn it feels like me LOL~!~ great poem and if ya wanna know what I mean then read my latest poem just posted
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Thanks Tiger
Yeah, I wanted something a little contradictory...and this was the result... AS I alwayhs say, I am everything I claim to be, and nothing of it at all....
Glad you liked this write,a nd thanks for the comment.
I'll check out your piece in a bit.
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