Held in time,
Seeking softly,
Lost in the covers,
Of dark's embrace.
Loveless lies,
Goes to show,
One cannot make,
A fruit of thorns.
Author notes
Not really sure if anyone will get it =/
A contest entry
- within the folds by going nowhere.
700 points, ended November 29, 2008, 9 entries
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Comments
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I certainly get a heavy sense of despair here
Superbly done, loving the imagery 'fruit of thorns' is wicked 
Could be wrong, but to me its about trying to change a loved one and it not succeeding, or loving someone who doesn't feel the same way. I love abstract as it can be interpreted so many ways The caps and commas on each line threw me a little, really don't think they are needed, just MO tho Superbly penned piece
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I read this, and now I have a heavy chest, I tensed up. It's filled with hopelessness. I know you say that a lot of your poems aren't about you, but just in case :-P, I don't know, I just want you to have hope. To be happy. Maybe the thorn itself cant be made into fruit, but there is good news.
" 1"I am the true vine, and my Father is the gardener. 2He cuts off every branch in me that bears no fruit, while every branch that does bear fruit he prunes[a] so that it will be even more fruitful. 3You are already clean because of the word I have spoken to you. 4Remain in me, and I will remain in you. No branch can bear fruit by itself; it must remain in the vine. Neither can you bear fruit unless you remain in me."
God can prune away the thorns so the fruit may flourish :-).
The poem itself was very well done Nichole, no doubt!!!
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what i read in this was a love that wasn't loyal... one sought true love, and the other didn't. as i read this, i mentally removed some commas to give it a better flow. i like pieces that make me think and draw my own conclusions to the meaning. everyone reading this may come up with something completely different. thank you
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