slowly tender lips brush bleach
from white cheeks
cold magnolia turns
rose blush
gently sensitive fingertips lift
dead locks from dust
to shimmer bright a crown
of gold
within loving gaze
memories stray from lonely mind
leaving dark's endless
maze
of cobweb corpse and crust
souls spark in four hands
Author notes
Prompt: Ashes
50 words
In a list
A contest entry
- ashes; [quickie 25/50] by etoile.
700 points, ended December 12, 2008, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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nice take on the prompt! this was an interesting poem and i really liked it. the imagery was beautiful, especially the first couple stanzas. i really like the ending, it's very unique beautifully written.
thanks for entering and goodluck
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Such a fragile image!
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This is a lovely right indeed I do believe from the ashes of life most beautiful things become thanks for sharing much love always
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From ashes...
two chrysalis emerge and take flight!
Absolutely gorgeous imagery dear heart, with a gentleness that caresses the senses. Perfect title association, fantastiche!
de beste wensen in de wedstrijd!
de groetjes,
lief, Sandi
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wonderful
such a very descriptive and well expressed choice of words. Best of luck in the contest.
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at which stage is a butterfly a butterfly? just when seen, or only when unseen, or even before being born as it was... always there about to be born? there are many ways to describe a wheel, there is a wonderful myra way amongst them
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taste of wine
The complexities you blend are as a fine wine
Intoxicating
Bravo & Salud'
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your words and lines are gems spilled on a velvet cloth
and yet the pattern they fall into is the real miracle.
I love your work
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love the title
This is the difference that one person can make to another, through recognising the inherent loveliness of humanity within. This is the fable of the phoenix in other words.
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