Get up in the morning searching for glass
So that every drop can be drunk
Sometimes I just take it straight from the bottle
Time to go to work dam think I'll just pass
Boss catches me at the pub an I get a kick up the arse
I just wish didn't have a job just pass
But then how would I afford another glass
Bartender another no rocks please serve fast
A taste for the whiskey burning for my lips
Get some sustenance a pack of Smiths crisps
Leanin on the Bar drinkin my dinner
Worked out a pub lunch is the best way to go
Sippin on the last drink of the night real slow
Crawl into bed head spinning to and fro
Wake up next morning head shaking so work i don't go
Need to get my priorities in order so I resign
Now my times all mine and the bottle is fine
gulp taste that delicious drink ...mmm that burns sweet ways
I drink the day away in a wonderful confused maze
I made the right decision...never could stand this work thing craze
Author notes
Work is the curse of the drinking classes.
Oscar Wilde
A contest entry
- I reached 5 years, and forgot. by Beautiful Irony.
400 points, ended December 21, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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AMAZING!
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Excellent
Firstly, I love your quote.
I like this poem. You will the person to get their act together, and then you write, "Need to get my priorities in order so I resign" and so the reader thinks "yes, they're going to deal with the drinking," but no, as it carries on "Now my times all mine and the bottle is fine." It's almost black humour, and it's great.
The complete lack of grammar (apart from the ellipsis) I love, because I tend to over use it, and am very grammar-critical (as I think I mentioned in the rules!)
I particularly like the first two lines of the second stanza : "A taste for the whiskey burning for my lips/Get some sustenance a pack of Smiths crisps" as they just have great flow.
I may be off the mark here, but I view the whole thing as having a level of black humour, and that I love.
I think I also mentioned in the rules that I'm a bit of a pedant, so I feel duty bound to mention that there's a typo in line 5: the "i" should be capitalised. Unless you've used it as a creative device, in which case I apologise.
Wonderful poem, a little offbeat, I guess.
I like it!
Thanks for entering
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Superb plus
A very fine write, indeed. Imagery; rhythm and rhyme are just fine. Thanks for sharing this one with us.
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lol, kind of a weird quote but it does make sense. love the poem, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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