His caste and color are different
Her off take and upbringing now necessarily percolate
They tried to convince their biological parents
unable to make them fall on positive way on any of the counts.
They ,decided to resort to eloping as last and final resort
like free birds choose to enact in their own way to have needed comfort
Author notes
Pick a word - Write a poem in 10 lines or less (E)
A contest entry
- Pick a word - Write a poem in 10 lines or less (E) by The Fun House.
1050 points, ended December 14, 2008, 30 entries
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I see where you are going with this poem (what you are trying to say), I do think though that it reads more like story than poetry. It doesn't quite flow properly. Perhpas rewording here and there would help to make it flow
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Great stuff!!!
So much expressed in so few words...
For within any culture, to break one's caste or class or belief in the name of love denotes a passion that trancends the physical...
Wonderful narrative with a profound message within that enthralled throughout...
Well done!!!
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