you seized my heart
held hostage freedom.
thoughts are of you
my feelings are of you.
you are a sweet mirage
I chase you.
but I never close upon,
you recede.
laying hold on me.
Author notes
A contest entry for:
Pick a word - Write a poem in 10 lines or less (F)
A contest entry
- Pick a word - Write a poem in 10 lines or less (F) by The Fun House.
1050 points, ended December 14, 2008, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Very pretty imagery to this piece. I think if you break up the lines a bit it would give better pause to digest them wholely. And capitalize the first word of the sentence
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This is really great....so much said with so few words. Good luck in the contest!
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a great word choice your poem matchs it perfectly good luck in the contest
maralisa
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Well done on fantasy...captured its essence well.
All the best!
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