She made her last mistake this time,
he is not listening to her anymore,
he has had enough,
enough to leave her,
he isn't coming back,
no, he just needs to be alone.
Girls want to talk it out,
Boys want to think it out,
walk it out, walk it off,
maybe she'll learn,
he deserves better, he deserves more,
guess it's time to call it a wrap.
She calls just to hear his voice
not sure what to say,
desperatly searching for closure
from the pain,
he just wants her to go away,
leave him alone,
he doesn't want her pain, he doesn't want her at all.
Girls want to talk it out,
boys want to think it out,
walk it out, walk it off,
maybe she'll learn,
he deserves better, he deserves more,
guess it's time to call it a wrap.
He wasn't going to stay forever,
should have known that by now,
she puts the phone down to the receiver,
wishes she knew,
maybe she isn't hopeless,
she is begining where she thought her life would end,
she is opening new eyes to the world,
ready to figure things out,
maybe she can learn after all.
Girls want to talk it out,
boys want to think it out,
walk it out, walk it off,
maybe she'll learn,
he deserves better, he deserves more,
guess it's time to call it a wrap.
Guess it's time to leave it alone,
he is not coming back for her,
should have known that by now,
live, learn, move on.
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Woulod make a wonderful song...great repeat stanzas for a chorus...very emotional with nice flow and depth...
nicely done...keep up the wonderful work...
best to you!
mystic
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really good
i like the theme, verse, characters, mood, etcmotives, decisions
it goes on a lot, for sure
lots of personal identification
you have a first place progression here
but
i don't get the ending
"....live, learn, move on....."
to the next bad job, fraudlent relationship, crummy neighborhood, so-so guy who's available, etc
it's like getting off at the wrong stiop
why don't each look at themselves in the mirror
it will reveal no stranger
we come, we go
you know, i know
do you want to forever beware
of the one under the stair?
oh, sorry
sometimes i see someone i don't know leaving
and
wonder if they are living under the stairs (lol)
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This is really very good. And something I can relate to as well! And yes...girls really do want to talk it out and guys just don't! Great insight and life lesson learned! Pam
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Great poem
Probably with this account you'll be happy. Visit when you get the chance.
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Hi Ms. Wonderful
I think this is really good
i like the repetitiveness you have throughout please keep writing, reading and commenting
Barbara
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