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Diablique #2

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Too late it was realized by her

pain was felt so soon,

very early all was had;

too young everything was lost.
The bite was done, blood was racing
life was going -fast-
closely held by a demon, she, becoming his slave.
Life leaving her body, her soul turning cold.
She began to turn back, but, coldness took over.
The perfect one, she would be, she was told.
Welcoming her, darkness, lost souls.

Alone she awoke sensing scents of rotten

while knowing it was once fragrant;

so innocent, yet, she rose a Diabolique.

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  • Sandygram silver member
    July 6

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    Very Heartfelt Poem!!!!

    Good Morning Tanya, A very dark and emotional poem. Stunning imagery in your words to bring the reader into the emotion you write with. A pleasure to read your wonderful poetry.

    Hugs and Smiles, Sandy


  • This is dark and seeps with the blood of vampires. It has been a while since I read a poem from the crypt that truly entranced me. Your work was splendidly dark and created a generous hint of sensuality. Very beautifully scribed even in its darkness.

    Much Love ♥

    Renee

  • Diabolique mais quelle mot magique. It is quite a fine write you have here and I truly did enjoy the read.

    Will have to come around and read more of your poetry.


  • Ethereal One gold member
    April 7
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    You take the reader to a dark place so well with your poem. The power of darkness is a great one, and your last 3 lines are powerful!

    I love the word Diabolique.


    Jeannette

    P.S.-I am going to send you a link to an old French movie by the same name. A great psychological thriller in it's time.


  • BeautifulXxDisaster silver member
    December 25, 2008
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    awesome dark vampiric write! I like the imagery and the pain inflicted... nicely done!


  • Mariana gold member
    December 25, 2008
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    Very descriptive! Well done

    Mariana


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    December 25, 2008

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    What a wonderful write and I love this picture! I have it on a background as well. Well done and thanks a lot for sharing this one here! Merry Christmas to you and yours!




    Jeremy0826


  • stylization
    December 24, 2008

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    Aamzing imagery. There is a connection in the words that links them together very well. It's qite sad but well-written. Merry Christmas.


  • Abe 1
    November 30, 2008
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    faB luved it
    sad deep dark
    thanz 4 ya entry
    cheers abe


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 29, 2008

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    wow, this was just wow, i don't even think i know the right word for this, it was dark but in it beauty i am amazed, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest

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