'You should have seen the world before it died'
So poised, too proud, those prickly pears of whit
When valleys green near oceans blue did slide
Where gregarious greed would not commit
Found two faced fickled fates in freedom’s fight
Where silent masses did absolve their blows
There was no one who there was wrong or right
It was only the face they must oppose
Gone now the world that was a joy to see
There was potential to help everyone
Along with flowers, birds, tall trees and me
They chose to steal from others with a gun
Oh what a place the world I knew could be
Still just in how you look, to what degree
Two Faced Fate…
Wandika 11-28-2008
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Author Note: If your sonnet does not read with this first line, it will be dsq.
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it's almost a tongue twister in that seciond stanza, but other than that, there is a short and tall, and seeign the two side sof mankind as well as nature itself.
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Thanks for the review.
Constructive criticism is always welcome.
Jim
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