beauty is ethereal
floating on gossamer wings
filling emptiness between
breaths taken and breaths exchanged
patterns on the horizon sing
A contest entry
- Quickie 10-20-30 by markgrif.
575 points, ended November 28, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
can you tell what I'm thinking so I know you understand?
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What do I say - I love this. I love the idea - the space between breaths is beautiful. I picture a couple standing close, almost holding their breath with the emotion of the moment. The feeling between them is the beauty between breaths taken and breaths exchanged.
Very nicely done.
celtic queen
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Atmospheric beauty- This sends me into a world without gravity or ground, somewhere in the realms of dragonflies and fairy rings in the sunlight....
Lovely.
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Matt, I really wish I could write like this. When I read something like this, it makes me reaize how clumsy my own is.
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beautiful imagery, the intimacy of warm breath all the way to the horizon.
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You've improved.
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it's hard to believe this still goes on
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how so?
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I loved the lines:
filling emptiness between
breaths taken and breaths exchanged
Well done, good luck
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beauty is ethereal
floating on gossamer wings ~
i like how you phrased this, nicely done!
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