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Spring alone can ------

Freezing  sneezing winters  isolate
Sprinkling and shrinking minds resonate

Warmth weaved and very much waving for you
All breathings are so fresh and truly anew

Spring alone can spark fire in the heart of hearts
Not listening to undue criticism hurled  in sorts

Freezing  sneezing winters  isolate 
Sprinkling and shrinking minds resonate

Author notes

Poetic Form: Octelle - Prompt - Fire

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  • Little Eagle Greeters member
    December 27, 2008
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    Thank you for your entry

    Well you followed the prompt well. The imagery and very well done and with good use of personification.

    Unfortunately you didn't do so well on the form. YOu have the rhyme scheme and line count down. But you didn't follow the syllable count at all. The syllable count was to be 8,8,7,7,7,7,8,8

    I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.

    God Bless
    Tammy