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Faceted

You are my multi-faceted lover
a no good two-faced lying sack of dung.
Tell the truth or soon you will discover
the horror of a lashing from my tongue.
I know you took the checkbook from my purse
to spend my money on a game of cards,
and then to top it off you made it worse
by buying beer and whisky for your pards.
Stealing your woman’s money is really so uncouth,
Unless at least you’d win a game; and that’s the Gospel truth.

Author notes

The multi-faceted never learn!

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  • Draig aine gold member
    January 22
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    well done

    still chuckling


  • just mercedes gold member
    December 27, 2008

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    Funny - a whole world pictured in a few lines, and all the complications of a relationship. Well done!


  • The Fun House silver member
    December 14, 2008

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    Too true, they do never learn A good piece. you tell it like it is and you cannot ask for much more than that

  • Draig aine gold member
    December 3, 2008
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    interesting

    very funny good lkyck in the contest