You had to have it all; you had to break me apart
You thought you played it smart but instead you stabbed my heart.
You heard me cry, you watched me fall
But you walked the other way and never looked back.
Every day that passes by is a new battle
I walk through these lonely paths and I still struggle
To erase you from my mind and erase you from my past
I burnt our last memory and watched it turn into dust.
Like a hungry predator you charmed me into your trap
I was another one of your stupid preys
You took me into your world, entrapped me in your web
You held me in the darkness and made me part of your lies.
I was always there for you giving you my support
But I was abandoned in the time I needed you the most
As my life is a constant fight to succeed
My days are constantly scarred by a fake smile
And each morning I fight my own mirror.
I was your little puppy giving you all of my love
But you retained yourself in a shell of pride
You will never see my pain
You will never see the tears I cry
I stand on my feet and I stand my grounds
Holding my head up high
Alone as you left me
As now I can “see your true colours
Inside you’re ugly, you’re ugly like me”.
Author notes
The Quotation comes from - stained : Outside
A contest entry
- Give ME EMOTION by Violent Glass.
700 points, ended January 29, 101 entries
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oh my god.. this should have won gold place. you were also screwed around by a PLAYER? well it happened to me, and it hurts like hell, and i really understand this. its a nasty ugly feeling. but NEVER ever call yourself ugly.. if you have the heart to write this poem, you can never be ugly. NEVER. this poem is sad and heartfelt and beautiful... i hope things go better for you, because it seems pretty dam bad right now isnt it?
feel better, keep smiling, be happy... AND WRITE MORE
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thanks for your comment.
yeah men suck is my final conclusion lol gotta depend on yourself alone no one else.
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"My days are constantly scarred by a fake smile
But you retained yourself in a shell of pride"
These are your best lines. Lots of feeling in this poem. I didn't like how you started off with a rhyme. It distracted me as I tried to find rhymes in the subsequent lines. Better to end with a rhyme if you are only going to have one. The last line seems contradictory to "holding my head up high." How can you if you think you are ugly?
I did like this poem. I really liked the imagery of burning your last memory and watching it turn to dust.
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Wow. This is amazing! I love it =) Very, very well written!!!! great job!!!!!!!
<3 - Jess
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Wow. Great job :)
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:) Kudos to you.
You did wonderful. I loved it.
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Wow
realy great write i love how this comes from the heart true and emotinal great job i love the whole thing nothing to compalin this is by far the best poem i have read all day keep it up keep on going stay true stay sic peace out and have a nice day -
NOT UGLY
Just human. we all make mistakes love. And someone who could write something this beautiful could ever be ugly! Kepp ur head up and aim for the sky. The best revenge is to live a happy life
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Thank you for your comment
I am not looking for revenge, no hard feelings. I am just mad I deluded myself and been waiting for a phone call that never happened haha oh well.
I won't be making a trip to the world of love any time soon.... that part of me belongs in my past for now
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