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Lost love

"I can't do this anymore"
A soft whisper
An anguished cry
A haunting thought
In the back of my mind
Where the voices reside
The unbidden plotters
That never let me forget
You

You who drowns in hell
With my name carved upon your lips
and tattooed on your tounge
You who's flesh burns for my touch
You cut me so deep
I didn't even feel it until later
Your words sharper than a knife
Needed time to sink in

Chains I didn't even know were there
Bind my heart and
Cause me to gasp from the pain
I thought I could barely feel
It's agonizing everytime I'm reminded
Everytime those internal thoughts
Bring up images of your face

Laying in anothers arms
I suddenly recall
Those things you said
That never made sense
Even in my twisted mind
Those things that now
Tell me exactly how you've always felt

No longer blinded
I await the day
That my heart
Leads me back to you

Author notes

I decided not to rhyme... I don't know if it was a mistake or not >.<

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  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 28, 2008

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    no, this way it give the poem a raw feel which to me makes it stronger, i know i felt it, keep it flowing