apparently we're future high school sweethearts
and i'm lucky to have you, but i'm confused.
i found you with clouded skies in your eyes and
bandaged guaze of your heart, but your smile
was still lit-up like candle lights.
you told me me that whenever i saw you lightening
bolts flashed in my eyes, and that you would try to
keep my the rain drops from falling from them.
...and they say i'm the lucky one
Author notes
i have a difficult mind right now... so i'm trying to get my gears in motion
A contest entry
- emotion quickie. [4/4♥] by innocence jaded.xx.
400 points, ended November 29, 2008, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pumpkin Pie by GypsyEyes.
400 points, ended December 22, 2008, 38 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Comments
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love it!
short, but beautiful
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Good write here
Atraction and the feel to be close to another for love and to heal feelings to see them through
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this is just sweet! it made me smile from the first line! thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! ~CarnalNineTailedFox
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I love the first two stanzas
They're amazing
The last one though, I feel it to be sloppy...
Overall this was great
And congrats on the trophie
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Amazing. I don't think anymore needs to be said. I absolutely love how you put this together and penned it so beautifully. Thanks for entering & good luck ♥
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This is amazing, as usual, with your metaphors and similes... sure hope you win something. Title is great, good luck in the contest!
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thanx bunches ^_^
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this is really sweet,
i like it a lot.
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