The pain made me awake
Quickly with a start
It's Christmas morning
I think I was good this year
I'm hoping Santa flooded the tree with presents
Although it's never been known to happen
This year I'm feeling lucky
My small hands quickly pushed the Barbie stained sheets off of me
I stumbled over broken toys and old dolls
Headed towards the door
I placed my hand on the knob
Only to find it locked shut
No surprise there
Daddy probably locked it to keep me away
His friends came over
He needed more candy for his veins
I stared at the door
Hoping this would make it unlock
With no success I decided to play with Cherry
Daddy named her
He told me
Youngest cherries taste the best
He told me
I could keep my Cherry until she runs away
She hasn't tried yet
As for this, I'm glad
She's my very best friend
And makes me feel safe...
Author notes
The below poems are like a short chapter in each story, from a different person's view of perspective each time. Reading them in order is probably the best idea, but you can also read them as an individual poem 
POEMS IN ORDER
Daddy Said I Could Keep Her, Until She Runs Away
I Avoided The Obvious
I'll Never Be Her Hero, But I've Never Really Tried
Coming Soon: Brittany Set2
Brittany- Set1
Takes place on Christmas
(note, she's around 7 years old)
Please don't critique this, I'm not going to change anything. I just want to know what you think of it, what you think should happen, etc etc. I'd love to get some ideas for what will happen later
"Bamboozled"
A contest entry
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This is sad...
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This is stark and very startling...a creative and deeply well written story...well done...I am very interested in reading the whole thing, so let me know as you get more done...
Best,
mystic
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Thanks
And I definitely will, I think the next part on it is either getting submitted tonight or tomorrow morning.
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i dont know y, but i felt it kinda creepy, (although i dont know what the story is about)and adore this kind of "creepiness".
i can clearly see that u evolved into a sensational poet/writer, and m so happy to witness this growth,
il b looking forward to read more similar pieces and hopefully il get to rad your story
tc sweety
Johnny,,,,,
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Thanks for the comment
And yea, my writing has changed a lot.
I'm working on the mom's part right now actually, but even if I finish today with it, I won't put it on until tomorrow. -
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then i'll be looking forwards to read them soon
gd luck with ur writing
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