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Future

sometimes I sit around and cry
sometimes I sit and wonder why
I wonder how our future would be
if you'd just take a glance at me
you to hug and hold
keeping from the cold
no more fake smile
for you, I'd go the extra mile
glorious face like an angel above
eyes burning bright with love
letting my feelings out
finally knowing what love is about
hearing your heart beat at night
knowing everything is just right

and because that one glance you did allow
this is how our future is now

sorry that it isn't so great, working progress here!

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  • urapns66
    February 2
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    This is awesome, your getting better and better and most importantly I'm glad to see that your writing more again. Your emotion in this one is immense, your really immersing yourself in your work and the ability to be able to do that is an awesome gift to have. my favorite lines were :
    "I wonder how our future would be
    if you'd just take a glance at me"
    your a great poet =]


  • Harrisham Minhas
    November 30, 2008

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    This is sweet.
    You have expressed your emotions nicely.

    Thanks for your entry.

    Harrisham Minhas