The betrayal
was perfect.
Your hoax
a work of art.
Impenetrable mask
I never saw through.
I never guessed.
Never knew.
Then you said
you loved me.
Another clever
deceit.
I almost believed.
Almost gave in.
Didn’t want
to throw it all away.
Said your vows
weren’t broken,
that there was
still a chance.
But I finally saw
the crack
in your flawless
masquerade.
And I realised.
And I left you.
As empty
as your promise.
Author notes
Taken from personal experience of a failed marriage 
In a list
A contest entry
- goodbye&thanks for the memories--[prose&freeverse.] by innocence jaded.xx.
400 points, ended December 22, 2008, 20 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Oh My Word~
Wowzers this tugs at the Heartstrings~
Powerful imagery also message- grabs the reader from the beginning~
Swells the eyes at the end
Congratulations on Your Trophy win!
-Throws confetti-
Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
with much love & light~ Desire~*~
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Oh, you just wrote down ever so eloquently everything that I think of those jerks who use women. An excellent poem. At the end of it, I thought: "Wow, she just owned this guy!" Nice job!
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Wow... Deep!!!
Honest, heartfelt & such emotional depth in disillusionment...
Strong narrative, great rhythm & flow & made for a compelling read...
Well done!!!
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i love it
your honestly is bful as you are
i agree that line is delisous
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Thank you so much. Glad you liked it
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WOW!!!! What a read this one is! Hope you are ok...
I know these feelings only too well, been there, done that! I love the images in this one, and one can feel your pain and betrayal.
And Welcome Back! I have missed you!
Best of luck in this contest!
and love
Nyetta
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I missed you too hon
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-The betrayal
was perfect.
Your hoax
a work of art.
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I love how you wrote that; very beautiful and vivid.
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Impenetrable mask
I never saw through.
I never guessed.
Never knew.
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I kind of like the unintended rhyming in this part of the poem. & the word impenetrable? Amazing :] Love how you used that so cleverly.
-But I finally saw
the crack
in your flawless
masquerade.
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Ahh, I like how you penned that ! "crack in your flawless masquerade;" I like the sort of irony there.
Thanks for entering & good luck ♥
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title: cleverly deceived.♥
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