When she is all alone, her lover absent
The sweet lady spends her time in quiet comtemplation
of the yearning and longing for her lover to return.
He never will again drape her silken skin with kisses sweet
Or gently cup her ripe breasts in his gentle hands.
Those slender hips from which silken garments flow now drenched with so many tears.
Her body trembles at the loss.
He tied her hair with golden bands
Diamond bracelets he placed upon her writst gentle and cool.
His body taut as a bow he shoots his arrow of love.
How wounded her heart.
She falls to the ground lost and all alone
Footfalls behind her
Epona answers her call.
Author notes
Adult. Enchanted Forest. Loved the picture prompt Stephen Perry. Wonderful.
A contest entry
- The Enchanted Forest-adults only by JinSays.
404 points, ended December 2, 2008, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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A stunning peice of work here Sob!
beautiful !
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Nice story
You have wonderful vision which envy. My only comment is that you use gentle twice in one line and then again. My suggestion is try not to use such descriptive words more than once if you can. The story line is great and the image is wonderful.
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First, I am a huge fan of anything celtic, and Epona was no exception. there's a reason the Romans had her image melded into the faces of their shields.
Her spirit can bring about sudden war with the drop of a hat.
I love the reverence you show here, and the untamedness she embodies, the wildness Im sure she provokes from her young lovers. . .and that thunder is felt galloping through the rest of the poem.
Really nice,
Best wishes,
love,
jin
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love this write...beautifully written...goodjob and best of luck to you in the contest and in the future.
andi
(redhanded)
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Nice and simple
Very nice and simple yet effective.
Good work
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Huzzah ..a lovely sad deep well written poem
good luck in the contest
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What a panorama you paint with your words.
The images are incredibly rich and full.
Your knowledge of mythology is just amazing, too. I find that I have to look up the references in order to understand the poem. I end up learning a lot, which allows me to better appreciate the effort you put into it.
Very well done.
P.S. line 1 "absent."
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