shining on white blossoms, twinned
Dogwood trees beside the window stand
as lovers touch, each one dreams the other
so close
in such proximity
one could easily imagine
two lovers fitted to each other
branches interleaving
in such a manner that
if the shorter were turned
toward the window just a bit
at a particular moment
when the sun shines smiling
from the northeast part of the sky
two trees intertwine
like lovers so close
they are the dream
each other dreams
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A very lovely write. I like the comparison of trees and lovers, because if a person has ever walked in a forest, it's really hard to tell where one tree ends and another begins overhead in a patch of canopy. Of course, from the ground, you know there are two but it would be impossible to separate the two without permanently damaging the other (if not killing it).
Great write, very fitting contrasts draw here.
s and best wishes always... ~Genie~
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