today I remembered
how bohemian light spilled,
greedy for your sea
drowning the sun where it touched
your skin
lighting a map of places
I had been
A contest entry
- morning songs by Nicolette.
1400 points, ended December 6, 2008, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think (Critical Honesty Appreciated)
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this is beautiful poetry; wonderfully succinct but with such great poetic quality and impact, Kate - but then, that is how i've come to know your writing
i agree with Guy about the subtle sensuality of this piece and oh my, i want to steal those closing lines...perhaps i should just steal the entire poem. a wonderful take on the contest prompt and what a special memory you've penned here. Loved it!
thank you for this lovely entry.
~ Nicolette
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been a while since i've read you, Kate; and i see you have not lost your touch
reading this piece has caused me to ponder the moment i gave up the bohemian light to become a tasmanian devil. lol
in all seriousness...i love the subtle eroticism of this write, and wish i had come up with those last two lines myself
thanks for this sultry entry
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I like this very much - smooth and silky...
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this is soooo absolutely gorgeous..i love the title, too
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ohh i love this.
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Aww... this is so sweet!! I love it! Lol, and I was actually trying to think of something to enter for this contest. But after reading some of the entries... I don't think I will. They're just too good to compete with. Especially this one. Excellent work and best of luck!
♣ Tegan
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it somehow rhymes... i like the colors and the "sea"
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