conception was easy, painless almost
joy and passion, a moment of elevated
awareness yet, somehow
unaccompanied by logical thought
speared in the heat of battle
ghosts of the dead warrior
haunt sacred battlefields, larger now
than when alive and breathing
in the middle, caught in cross hairs
the truth hides in plain sight
vain attempts, applying coat after coat
covered in flowery layers of rhetoric
still, the original color bleeds through
each time, darker than before
put into a corner, backed further than ever
as dark as it seems, the vision becomes clearer
the time is set, soon it will fade from memory
farther away, pushing from front to back
denying and defying, death
comes peacefully, but not naturally
wiped clean, remorse lived for only days
survived by a lifetime of regret
having just been born.
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Written February 5th, 2004
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confusion is really clarity
hey!! i like the enquirer. in fact, i was in it. didn't you see the edition featuring the baby born with antlers? that was me when i was little, but they fell of when i turned four. lol
anyways, the great thing about literature is that it means different things to every reader. some readers may understand some of the what the author meant, but nobody can REALLY understand exactly what the writer meant.
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i can only imagine what a boring poetry world we would live in, if we all "understood" exactly what a poem meant, and exactly what an author was feeling at the precise moment he/she wrote the words. perhaps one should explore a body of work, rather than a single offering before passing judgement? then again, if you are looking for something that "means" more to the reader than the poet, i hear the enquirer is very helpful in that regard.
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I like that last stanza about remorse and regret. Why are they so tough to beat? And why are they so easy to bring into one's world? Nice one!
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What's with the no comments? Ok theres one comment but you know what I mean your poems generally attract hordes of people.
I'm not gonna lie and say I understood this cos I don't and there's no point in lying about it...
It's a good poem though well written and all though it feels slightly Painful...
I miss you Jakey
damnit!!
Jadey xXxXx
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Very well written piece here, GG. You make yourr point succinctly and articulately
Gary
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