She sat there oh ! so beautiful, beside the moonlit tranquil sea,
her long dark tresses crowned her face, her blooms held so carelessly.
Her dark silken, full length gown, draped around her slender frame,
the sea mist lingering in its folds seemed anxious to remain.
The enigmatic flawless beauty, of her dark eyes and olive skin,
the look of careless abandon, hid who knows what thoughts within.
Then after some timeless moments her face lit up with a smile,
she put her lovely arms around me and said" let's kiss I like your style."
Providence then intervened in the shape of my dear wife,
who said "you’ve been dreaming again you live a hectic life".
"Go downstairs and bring me up a nice hot cup of tea",
"I hope you didn’t dream about her again sitting by the sea".
Author notes
JUDMC prompt 2/6
A contest entry
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Comments
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such a lovely story...for the ending is so delightful...thanks for sharing this piece
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Emerald Lass
Many Thanks for your kind comments on "Lent" glad you liked it
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second-born
Many Thanks for your kind comments on "Enigmatic Beauty" pleased you enjoyed
it...... Best Wishes George...
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Lovely work here but I must point out that in the firest set of speech you use here:
'” lets kiss I like your style.”' you actually have the opening speech marks facing the wrong way. It's easy to correct just move your cursor to 'lets' and at the start of the word put the ". I'm sure you already know that and it was just a typo but I thought I would let you know. Another thing I must pick out, I don't understand the last three lines of the final stanza. To me they seem forced, put there because the author could not think of something else to put. A forced set of rhythmes almost. I know it happens to me a lot and it just takes a little edge away from the poem.
If we look at the rest of it though then we can see why it has won so many trophies. I think you must have put a lot of hard work into this and I thank you for sharing it with us because it is truely something splendid.
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Dryad Enya
Many Thanks for your comments on "Enigmatic Beauty" as you can see the
speech punction marks are identical fore and aft of the spoken word and are
not differentiated on my British keyboard. Regarding the last 3 lines they
were not an afterthought but provide a sting in the tail humorous paradox,
a feature of many of my poems. e.g. "Little Girl" "Blue eyes" "Peter's Girl"
"Philip's Way" "Darwins Chair" etc. etc. ...Yours in Appreciation....George...
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I'm torn between yes and no.. I'm going to give you the benefit of the doubt.
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so very wonderful, vividly beautiful thank you for entering our contest ..novy & brazos
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ennovy
Many Thanks for your kind comments on"Enigmatic Beauty" much appreciated
glad you liked it. Best Wishes....George.....
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This very beautiful poem.
I loved this line the most:
"The enigmatic flawless beauty, of her dark eyes and olive skin"
Thank you for entering, good luck!
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Well done some well balanced rhyme
thank you for entering our contest
...novy & brazos
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Beautiful! I really love the imagery in this piece. though it does have very long lines, but the flow really keeps it together. Good write!
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I loved the imagery. Great flow. Beautiful write.
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hellzkitkat420
Many Thanks for your kind comments on "Enigmatic Beauty"
so glad you enjoyed it Best Wishes...George...
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your imagery is outstanding, and i love the ending.
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anaisnais
Many Thanks for your kind comments on "The Humanoids part one"
so glad you liked it.I sincerely hope your health situation improves but I can see that it would take a hell of a lot to get you down.
I too have an interest in the Paranormal,you may have read my
"Near Death Experience" poem.I have read many books on the subject
by Dr. Kubler Ross. Raymond Moody and many others. Good Luck and
Best Wishes ...George....
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poet360
Many Thanks for your kind comments on"Enigmatic Beauty" so glad you like it Best Wishes...George...
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those mermaids are something, aren't they?
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Scandal!
I love it. Your words are so pure and exquisite, and forbidden. Lovely writing!
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Very lovely words...so nice with the pic...thanks for the entry!
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Ah the stuff that dreams are made of.. thank you for entering...mal
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fool no 1
Many Thanks for your kind comments on "Enigmatic Beauty" so glad you liked it..Best Wishes...George...
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Wonderful flow and rythm to this piece. I like the imagery that you open with as well, the end was a subtle shift. Very well written. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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cup of tea indeed! Let her tromp down stairs and get her own tea and she could get you one too while she's at it. LOL ... day dreams are frightful because we always seem to get caught. I hope you don't talk in your sleep
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Bella Beautiful
I like the title and the body of the poem. It was well written. Thanks for sharing. I loved it. The beginning was amazing about the tranquil sea.
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Thank you for your beautiful entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
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I liked the rhyme in this and the ending was interesting, thanks for sharing
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Nicely penned.....am smiling at the ending .....so how did your wife know you were dreaming of her who sits by the sea
....Nothing like a random read to break the night more so when there is humour to make you smile.
Thank you.
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dustookie2
Many thanks for your kind comments on"Enigmatic Beauty" my wife knew
because of the word "again" which indicates that I have had and related the dream before...George....
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I think I have been thrown a curved ball ....was reading entries for the Miracle contest by the Poetic Bandits. Then I dont think I have ever seen one poem entered in so many contests... Good luck in the contests still open for judging.
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dustookie2
Re your further comments what has you "been given a curved ball"
got to do with me entering a number of contests with my poem
Many Thanks for your kind comments on "Miracles of the Future" could you indicate which words you would consider to be padding to improve
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George the curved ball was the fact I was looking at a unrelated contest to any of the ones listed for this poem ...am guessing it was late or early in the wee hours of the night or morning depending on how you look at things .... I will talk with you right now I have to go .... work calls. later tonight before it gets too late so I am thinking clearly...This is a good poem and yeah got nothing to do with the poem just as I said i had never come across a poem attached to so many contest before it really made me think what was going on here if I had actually somehow ended up on the contest page because as it was all I could see up and down on my screen were contest....now I think about it some it is rather funny from my side of the screen...still a great poem none the less... must run ..........later..
Mook
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thankyou for entering,
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I was wondering if you would mind left alligning this poem for me? " Enigmatic Beauty"
(only if you want too)
I checked the picture prompt you wrote it from, and it was spot on,
Thanks.
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PoeticLove
Dear Dorothy I have left alligned "Enigmatic Beauty" she threw me a dirty look but I managed it.How are you? I'm so glad you are still with us,I must go on you're patch and read some of you're writes.Best Wishes and a Happy New Year....George ++++
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OK, so...this made me laugh,
great humor,
cute surprise ending.
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This was a very entertaining poem. I enjoyed reading it and I am glad you decided to enter in the contest!
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Thank you for entering my contest with this poem this is an enchanting poem - I like the way it added a little humour at the end I like the rhythm and rhyme of this piece - well constructed!
Keep writing
Polly
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Wonderful imagery and emotion! Great work! Thanks for the entry and for your help!
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Thank you for entering this contest, and I wish you all the best.
Love,
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This is very beautiful, I like it alot.
Great descriptions and emotion.
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Best of luck in my contest!
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Thank you for your beautifully spoken entry, Josie
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