Sparking, crackling, burning, smiling,
hypnotizing, most beguiling.
Dance of colours just for you,
every flame a picture new.
Cloak of warmth to make you sigh,
as you sleep here, by and by.
Sparking, crackling, burning, smiling,
hypnotizing, most beguiling.
Author notes
Prompt - Fire
Octelle
The Octelle, created by Emily Romano, is a poem consisting of eight lines using personification and symbolism
in a telling manner. The syllable count structure for this verse is 8, 8, 7, 7, 7, 7, 8, 8, and the rhyme scheme is
aa/bb/cc/aa. The first two lines and the last two lines are identical.
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A contest entry
- Poetic Form: Octelle - Prompt - Fire by Little Eagle.
600 points, ended December 27, 2008, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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this is good- bronze well won - thanks for sharing
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Warm
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Delightful introduction to a form that is new to me. Lots of imagery and nicely done personification. Engaging meter adds effect to the "hypnotizing" attribute!
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I just loved this piece of work. I was sitting here by my gas fire reading this and wished that it was an open fire cause you made it feel so warming and welcoming. I have to congratulate you on the bronze trophy. Very well deserved indeed.
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I like this form and enjoyed your write emphasizing the benign aspect of fire.
Congrats on your bronze trophy.
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beautifully vivid.
congratulations on the bronze. <3
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a good poem, i don't think i have seen this form before, there are so many form poems though to delight in
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Thank you for your entry
Well done on this one. The prompt was well done in this one. I like the imagery of it and how you have personified the fire as if it were a friend that always warmed your soul as well as your body.
Excellent job on the form, the rhyme scheme was well done and the flow was good. They syllable count was right on as well.
I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
Tammy -
Wonderful
Great use of form. You are so good at doing rhyme. Thank you for sharing.
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Your rhyming is always so flawless and in this case it is so very vivid in its imagery.
Best wishes in the contest.
Love Margaret
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i dont know the form but it crackles good luck miss
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interesting style and awesome description!
I might have to try that!
God Bless,
ZeInkslinger
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I've never heard of this form of poetry, you are so very clever sis...and I must say you will try your hand at anything and always bring us something beautiful from whatever form you choose. The rhyme is stunning, you've done such an excellent job with the prompt, A very lovely read indeed. Well done sis! superb work.
Shaz xx 
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Poet
I wonder do these visions ever really materialize. For at times your ords are cause for lovely fantasies.
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Its very descriptive. And vivid
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