You should have seen the world before it died,
when skies were white-streaked blue and not this red.
You should have seen the ocean’s final tide,
the sun and moon before they went to bed.
You should have seen the vibrant, gaudy flowers
and the rolling hills and fields of purest green,
the world in all its glory in those hours;
that is the ancient world you should have seen.
But now that man has caused that world to fade,
the skies are crimson tears shed by his kin;
the grass is weak and the gay flowers greyed
now the world has been destroyed by his last sin.
That which God made beautiful, pure and bright
has, by man, been dispelled to darkest night.
Author notes
First line taken from contest prompt.
I do love writing sonnets!
It's meant to be an epitaph, but I'm not sure how well I managed that - more of a religious message/warning for the future, I think! I'm not actually that religious, but it just fitted so well with this theme.
A contest entry
- A sonnet please, by Titus.
700 points, ended November 30, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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its reali good!
the onli bit i dont reali like is the phrase 'gone to bed', but each to their own
xxx
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the volta somehow changes to history in this, which only tells us, once again, how the cycle works, from bright, to dark, to bright again. This hints of the revelations in this.
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