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Return To Life

The shadows on the wall,

they stare at me
with deserting eyes.

Ice crystals on crimson petals
bring to life
a single thought...

A blanket of pure snow
covers the grounds

Skies turn to grey
Thorns pierce my heart

Standing in this empty room
staring out the window
into eternity...

 

When shall you return?

The days; I have been counting
It's been almost a year...

Winter prevails
Pure beauty, piercing pain...

 

The rose that still stood

collecting smooth flakes

melting day by day

 

Dew-drops slowly form

Yes, that rose is my soul
in the dead of winter.

 

I am still awaiting your return

 

Suddenly I see

a silhouette walking

towards these frozen grounds


My rose begins to glow,

returning to life


Shadows on the walls dance
then slowly fade into the darkness

Your arms await me.
Dark winter forest no more...       

a winter garden fulfills your promise

 

Blazing memories of you
kept me warm

 

And so we lie

covered by blankets of snow

 

Our fingers interlocked,

cold lips engaged in a warm kiss

body heat melting the snow.

 

We shall never again part...

        

 

 

Author notes

This is the first thing I've written in a long time. Hehe. It's not great at all! But I really liked the contest. I love the winter! And I love roses. So I hope you enjoy this Billy. =)

Picture Credit: http://rajala.deviantart.com/art/Tomb-of-a-Frozen-Rose-43475510

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  • Walk-Free
    December 13, 2008

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    hauntingly beautiful.

    "Winter prevails
    Pure beauty, piercing pain... "

    you had these little lines here and there that refueled the emotional fire in this poem.

    well done and congratulations to all those trophies!

    peace


  • Venugopal gold member
    December 4, 2008
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    lovely poem, you have great talent


  • Invisible 2 you
    November 30, 2008
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    wow. love the metaphor nice


  • Rhythm Child
    November 30, 2008

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    k that was the formal comment now heres mine ! BEAUTIFUL POEM LOVE, really sad picture aswell lol
    Our fingers interlocked,

    cold lips engaged in a warm kiss

    body heat melting the snow <<< really great lines, so soft and gentle and it created such a lovely image in my head


  • Rhythm Child
    November 30, 2008
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    BEAUTIFUL
    great entry
    thanks for taking part, wishing you luck would be an insult to your talent so take care

    message me for anything
    Billy (Rhythm Child)


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    November 28, 2008

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    I was reminded of Beauty and the Beast a little with this; maybe cause of the rose

    I absolutely adore the imagery of the rose wilting and then blooming again when the love has returned

    Utterly beautiful love poem!
    Best of Luck

    Stay safe
    ~Manda


  • Alyzeh
    November 28, 2008

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    This has a little bit of everything. Sadness, hope, and love. I like it. So I see you've been missing him. I'll pray you two meet soon. A great write yet again Ylova. Your work is really good. I want to be smart like you too! =(
    Excellent work! Best of luck in the contest


  • Chocolate Dime
    November 28, 2008

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    oh...this was outstanding. the feeling was so raw, i absolutely loved it. and the metaphors, of the rose for love, the snow in winter for cold bitter loneliness...it was all wrapped together so well. brilliant, love.


  • Joseph Hollis
    November 28, 2008

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    Brilliant imagery. A fiery love in the middle of winter's harsh embrace. The use of the rose as a metaphor for love was also a nice touch. Well done.


  • Scyphon
    November 28, 2008

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    This was amazing, the imagery and metephors, the pain of winter cold mixed with being alone. It tore at me, but you lifted me back up, like a wilted rose after it is watered regains life. It was a beautiful ending. So nice to see it end with loves embrace


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 28, 2008

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    this is kind of different then what how you normally write but still a great and golden poem, i like it, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    November 28, 2008

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    other than the suggestions that I mentioned to you. this poem is fantastic. for not writing for a long time, you've done excellent. it feels odd sometimes after not writing for a bit, but your poem is outstanding. the imagery is fantastic and quite vivid.

    good luck
    mommy


  • Jesann gold member
    November 28, 2008
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    Loved this from beginning to end,
    Very beautiful....a great write.


  • Ken-Maverick
    November 28, 2008

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    Beautiful, sad and hopeful all at the same time
    I really enjoyed reading this write.
    So packed with emotions
    Excellent!

    Goodluck in the contest

    Ken


  • Girl-Interrupted gold member
    November 28, 2008

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    I too love the winter and roses...this was an exellently penned piece. I love readimg uour work, entrancing...!

    becca

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