tossing, turning...
in a semifetal pose
I wonder where you sleep tonight...
Author notes
photo by A. Everitt
A contest entry
- just 12 words by Lavender Butterfly.
550 points, ended November 29, 2008, 20 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Don't know how I missed this - an impressive use of 12 words! You are able to conjure up a scene out of nothing! And I loved your comment about Zadee - LOL
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this is beautiful.
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WOW! This was amazing. Great 12 words you have penned here Anna
Congrats on the Silver trophy! Well deserved.
Much love
Ylova
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I'm sure he can't sleep...
he must have so much regret.
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Jason, Thank you
Anna Lee
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Hmmmmm
Would make me wonder as well.
This one really make you say. I remember that one night....
Great job!
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You've done what I can never seem to do...create something memorable in under twenty words! Congrats on your silver - well deserved, my friend. Love, Lane
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Congratulation!
Well deserved award
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Thank you Sir William
Anna Lee
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Very nice, brief and powerful. I like this very much.
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Thank you, I am glad you like it
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few words with a sweet touch of feelings within the realm of romance...just excellent...
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Thank you Sir Darshan
Anna Lee
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Excellent! What a great image you described with so few words! That requires talent, which you obviously have
So wonderfully done beautiful Anna
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Mari, thank you so much
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terrific!.. x
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the title is absolutely the most important part of this poem, imo, there is nothing worse than sleeping, or more like trying to sleep on 'that' side of the bed well done, Anna..
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Thank you so much ,
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I am so glad that I am too old to have all those romantic flushes anymore...well the flushes are fine, it's when thing inevitably go wrong and then those feelings you just wrote about well up inside...blech, scares me just thinking about them.
Well, maybe somewhere there's a hint of it alive inside me.
If this is based on current events, I am sorry...that's a lousy place to be in...and you get right to the heart of it..."where does he sleep?" Because that is what we wonder..."where does he sleep now" and "who with?" for that is the unwritten fourth line of your poem (I think.)
People are crap...you and a few others excluded of course.
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it's only for this contest Sir Yem... for some reason, I like to enjoy the bed by myself although like you said there's also that 'maybe somewehere,' alive in me as well
and yes!!! glad to be excluded too
oh zadee sleeps beside me [edit]
Anna Lee
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This made me think of the old song by Peter Sarsted "where do you go to, my lovely, when you're alone in your bed..."
This is lovely and i really like the way the picture and the poem compliment each other. Many of us have asked that question so many times!
~ Nicolette
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Thank you Nic
the song intrigued me I will have to download it so I could listen
Anna Lee
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OOOooooOO
I love it!!!!!...Makes the dark side of your brain wander into 'where are you now' mode...so sad when people carry heavy weight like as depicted here...almost like there isn't anything better out there, and they are left to 'share' so to speak....great job on this & thanks for sharing your thoughts on mine...
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Ms Mo,
Thank you so much, I've read yours...so galing
Anna Lee
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Short, simple and says all that needs to be said,
well done on this write Anna
All the best to you in the contest
Ken
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Thanks Ken
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wow
Alot said in so few words! I love this piece my friend, very understated yet works perfectly.
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Thank you Rich, glad that you like it
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