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Doppleganger

Glistening eyes
Speaking clearly
Glimmer on beauty stained lies
Story of seduction

A contest entry

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  • Swan song gold member
    December 4, 2008
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    Excellent beginning This is something you could add to I believe and make it even better


  • Lavender Butterfly silver member
    November 29, 2008
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    creatively drawn... x


  • delightfulmess silver member
    November 28, 2008

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    oooh very deep take here.
    I enjoyed your 12 words here very much
    best of luck in the contest.


    Delila


  • Mozaic
    November 28, 2008

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    Euphoric yet sensual fused with a heavy 'ouch' factor that hits home...good luck in the contest!