cordonned off
my enthusiam for the same subject has wane
stiff shadows lock down crators and ridges
can't stand the cold eye of judges
while words without breath
fall like slaves to obligation
paper brittle and dehydrated
no one to hold what falls
can you tell what I'm thinking so I know you understand?
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i think you're thinking and feeling bored with the everyday expenses of your hard work and trials and getting sick of no one appreciating what you do or how you do it. tired of feeling like you're doing and saying for others satisfaction only to find that their gratitude is less than expected. growing ill of saying what others want to hear just to keep peace when the words spoken are fake and lost.
am i even close, or did i just totally kill it?
either way, that's the feeling that i get from this piece. -
Again, I can't really tell you what you're thinking,
and I don't really understand - but I think you're becoming disenchanted with what you're doing = work or school. I'm thinking that you feel stifled and bored and you're tired of submitting your work to others who may not understand. You want to break out and express yourseslf - what you're really thinking and wanting, but feel you can't. You have to do what you have to do - for whatever reason. And there's no one who will really listen to what you have to say.
So, how did I do? (My guess, I missed it entirely.)
celtic queen
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