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Lorelei

I sit on the shores of the Columbia river
under the gentle gaze of a quarter moon.
Its soft glow glimmers off the ripples.

An easy calm overcomes me
like the touch of a gentle woman.
Perhaps a Lorelei beckons me
to swim to a spit in hopes of love.

I do not know of a native equivalent
but tonight such a temptation
invites a smile of fantasies in my mind.

When I was younger I could not appreciate
a night as soft and easy as this one
and would scoff at the musings, but I muse now.

I let a dream rest in the crescent of the moon
content to let it hang all night long.
As I dream in the soft flow of river water
easy enough to drown in visions
of love, of enticement:

Of all the things that make life good.

Author notes


Lorelei
German Loreley,

large rock on the bank at a narrows of the Rhine River near Sankt Goarshausen, Ger. The rock produces an echo and is associated with the legend of a beautiful maiden who threw herself into the Rhine in despair over a faithless lover and was transformed into a siren who lured fishermen to destruction. The essentials of the legend were claimed as his invention by German writer Clemens Brentano in his novel Godwi (1800–02). Lorelei has been the subject of a number of literary works and songs; the poem Die Loreley by Heinrich Heine was set to music by more than 25 composers.

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  • Mango Memories gold member
    November 26
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    bravooo!


  • Fallen-Thumper
    November 10

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    thank you for entering

    i really like this piece, great job, nature is amazing to write about and you have captured this well, great job. good luck and thanks for entering!
    -penguin-


  • Knight70
    May 30

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    Congratulations on another bronze!

    I always appreciate your nature poetry. Nature is its own masterpiece. Bravo! I appreciate the author notes in this one. It's always nice to learning something new.

    Don


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    December 1, 2008

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    "When I was younger I could not appreciate
    a night as soft and easy as this one
    and would scoff at the musings, but I muse now."

    A turning point in realization. This is quite a forceful and masculine write to this prompt and is absolutely stunning. I love it.

    And, to let a dream rest in the crescent of the moon is such a soft phrase. Whether you meant it as reference to procreation or not, it is how I perceived it. What tender gentle words to express such.

    Excellent. Thank you for such a splendid and original verse. I loved it. ~Pamela


    • Swan song gold member
      December 4, 2008
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      Thank you for your comment pam and for the bronze but most of all thanks for such a cool contest!


      • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
        December 5, 2008
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        So pleased to see your name pop up at the contest close. A terrific entry. Congratulations. ~Pamela


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 28, 2008

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    kind of a nice poem if you really get into it , love the whole thing as it flows, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • delightfulmess silver member
    November 27, 2008

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    WOW... This is stunning... the 1st 3 lines of the last stanza were spectacular!!!

    A sensational take sweetie
    Best wishes in the contest.


    Delila

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