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It Stares

And it stares through windows
Painted in colours
Blinding
Erractic beating, thundering horsebeats
That ricochet against the chest
Boom
Boom
And she stands
Waiting in the distance
So patiently
Loyally
Do I deserve this
For who am I
A no-one
Nothing
Just me, nothing special
And it stares
Watching me
Knowing my thoughts and dreams
Knowing the truth I hold inside
The truth I tell her
Words
So easy to give, so easy to say
But truthful
And so it stares
Until we are together again
Then it sleeps

Author notes

It stares... and all my words are true...

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  • Candyknife gold member
    November 28, 2008

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    hmm...

    well this is in fact deep and heartfelt
    it was very obvious as to what this write is about, but the word is nowhere to be seen
    good job with this, and thanks for entering


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 28, 2008

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    there is nothing i can really think to say here, i enjoyed the read but i am at a lost, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


    • Dmonik
      November 28, 2008
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      This write is about Love... it stares through windows, waiting for us all to embrace it and accept it...
      Glad you enjoyed this, and thank you.

      'D'


  • NyteShade
    November 27, 2008

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    Well this is very deep. Lots of words lie in our thoughts, we just have to figure out what we want to do with them.
    Great write here Scott. well done and good luck


    • Dmonik
      November 28, 2008
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      Thanks Bell.
      Words are the expressions of our feelings..it's how we lay them out the strikes the chords.
      Glad you like this and thanks for the comment.

      'D'


  • Silent Cougar Moderators member
    November 27, 2008

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    whoa,, someones been really deep within the inner chambers again...I like this, very imaginative way of saying what you see is what I offer,,,truly.

    Well done, I am sure this will do well here.


    • Dmonik
      November 28, 2008
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      Thanks Mike
      I am what I am, and people either accept me or not.
      Glad you like this write, and thanks for commenting.

      'D'


  • UnManned4Ever
    November 27, 2008

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    This is really good. And it's a good question! great write once more D! Keep up the good work! X

    • Dmonik
      November 27, 2008
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      Thanks Annie
      Glad you like and thanks for the comment.

      'D'

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