Beneath the months new moon,
my sons palm lays
cocooned in mine.
Sharing his smile,
I watch in wonder.
Wishing I could charter
the galaxies shining bright
within eyes just ten seasons old.
To once again visit the world where
senses unfold with vibrancy.
Longing to view this place,
where planes are like magic
flying amongst the twinkles,
and innocent awe...
remains untarnished
by wisdom's wear.
Holding him close,
he tries to take mommy there.
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Author notes
Prompt: "the crescent of maternal moon"
In a list
A contest entry
- the crescent of maternal moon by Pamela A Lamppa.
1050 points, ended December 1, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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First read
For my first read of your poetry, I was sweetly impressed. I felt the endearing quality of your words, and the innevitable yearnings of our souls.
-Darmok
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This as sensatiponal in my opinion!!!! very well done
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So pure and so much intimate sentiments ..love it..very creatively you shared the beauty of the heart..very well done poetry my friend..thanks..
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Such a powerful and nurturing love you've described here. This could melt the most frigid of hearts. Thank you for sharing.
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Oh My~~
Holy Moly this is a Gem of a verse Hot Momma and what a weaving of words to brings smiles also swell the eyes-
Children are so Innocent and Blessings in all phases of their lives- Heck I have a teenager and he is still my baby- even at 17-
Love these lines:
Wishing I could charter
the galaxies shining bright
within eyes just ten seasons old.
You took the prompt to a whole new level!
Excellent!!
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in the contest Sweet One
Best wishes too
with much love & light~ Desire~*~
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Beautiful.
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lovely.
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Aw, sigh! This is so beautiful and deeply touching in its sincerity and tender simplicity. Very moving! Congrats for being featured and thank you for sharing this moment!
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So beautiful..
This captures almost perfectly what it is to look into a young childs eyes. It captures the innocence and magic of just being young.
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Beautifully sentimental and heartfelt. I, as a mother, understand this feeling completely. God bless you and your child. Regards,Gypsy
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Sweetly penned with a loving heart, most truly so. 
BRAVO!
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Oh, my GOSH... that So BEAUTIFUL!
You seem to be a kindred spirit.I must needs put you on my favs list!God bless!Both of you!
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contented with awesomeness...
the first stanza brands the gazed upon experience to another consciousness. and then second reiterates to that iota of eyed treasure for etcetera
you sweetly make for an associative ripple of priority, as we are to be intrigued as to our heavenly father even by family intimacy in nature over "the galaxies shining bright
within eyes just ten seasons old" like Isaiah 40:26 reissues such for each. too I can't say well but quote often drawing boards that go across remindingfully
we do become blase around feats that took steps but it's not whipped when working with order of things to get off ground even, so rearrangement maybe wouldn't be for amazement
you contrast time's tracks
contained for a title that's not necissating an island
but within design for more than impressions, nice ~
called Carolyn
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Awww sweetie this is just beautiful!!!! A truly amazing piece of thought and fantasy. The emotion within, as the bond between wisdom and invention begin... Children are indeed so very moving in their innocence; if only we could again see what they see - if only for a moment. Great write!
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aww how beautiful! this is awesome! nicely done!
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Stunning...as always.
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Beautiful poem. You paint a beautiful picture of a moment between a child and his mother and take us there... I, personally, am glad to have gone on this trip.
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Oh wow, this brought a tear to my eye. Im a mummy, so I know exactly what you mean. Their innocence is such a precious gift, and watching them grow is a miracle. I loved this piece, very beautiful.
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Children are beauty.
I like this.
Congrats on making the spotlight.
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If we could see the world through the eyes of a child, what wonders we would discover, so sad that as we age and just get involved with the daily grind of living, we seldom take a look around and see these wonders that are so clear in their young eyes. Simply beautiful
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I think that this is beautiful and glad to see it got a spotlight well deserved indeed thanks for sharing be well.
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How beautiful this is...nothing like the innocence of a child and the beauty it holds untainted...your word choice and flow is wonderful and the whole write makes one *sigh*...awsome work...
Blessings,
mystic
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how beautifully heartfelt this write is! the first line is so wonderful...oh man it just captures the moment. Lines 11 and 12 are haunted with a child's wide eyes: i pray God i never lose the feeling i get when i see planes. thank you so much for writing for us to read.
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You know...I think he did.
How utterly tender and dear. A treasure in words of thoughtful emotion. Beautifully written to this prompt. Thank you for such a tender and elegant poem. Simply beautiful. ~Pamela 
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This is a very nice read. Good job. Thanks for sharing it with us.
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There's so much love in this poem it made me smile. Your words just made that feeling stronger. A wonderful write
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Simply beautiful!
The sensitivity and love displayed in this poem has left me with a feeling of warmth. Bravo!!
Mariana
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to see the world with fresh eyes ... what a great blessing you have thru Joseph's eyes.
thanks.
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The love pours out with every well thought out word. I enjoyed it very much. Thanks!
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That is such a beautiful poem. Oh how it tugs at my heart strings. Beautiful.
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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Wonderful poem, it shows how much you love your son in a lyrical, lovely light.
Best of luck in this contest. -
Beautiful!
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Aaahh the wonder in a child's eyes... To see the unabashed joy, the spark of curiosity, the light of discovery and the innocent, untainted awe of everything new... There's nothing quite like it.
Great poem. Thanks for sharing it!
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Beautiful, simply beautiful.
Very emotional.
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aww that is so beautiful and emotive, wow. What a brilliant ending!! I loved this, well done to you
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He is such a beautiful soul, I love him so much he is the world to me
They grow so quickly it seems, oh and it's ten seasonsThis is a beautiful penning Im very happy you have written about our angel.What I would'nt give to see through his eyes sometimesThanks for sharing this wonderful poem
Best of wishes to you always.
Tony
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Ok I changed it to 10.
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Oh my there you go Good luck with this awesome poem you got my vote
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awesome!
what a beautiful and dreamy write, filled with love, I'm bookmarking this fantastic piece of art.
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So true
How funny life is though. We rush to grow up only to wish we could be that child once again. Great reflective write poet. One I think you should save and show to your son.
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Wonderful write
I still act like a child sometimes, but it is not the same. This is softly beautiful.
Thank you for sharing.
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What a beautiful picture you have painted with this, through a child's eyes and from a mother's perspective. It made me smile C
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Aww.. gosh.. this is just gorgeous hun!!! Innocent wonder is such a joy to see in the young isn't it, and how they try and take us into their world. How we'd often like to go hey?
Beautiful write!
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